/lit/ - Literature

[Anonymous No.2978207]

I just wrote my first poem! Tell me what you think.

It's pretty douchey, but be gentle with me.

Also: Poetry General

Untitled, by a faggot

I don't want to hurt anyone
I don't want to cause harm
I just want to bask in the Sun
I just want to get along
There's always so much strife
And not enough calm

Fate is out of our hands
The cosmic cycle goes on
The world isn't ours to command
Let go and just swim along
The sun will rise, the sun will set
Why not make a beautiful song?

We feel seperate from nature
The stars look so far away
But we're all in it together
The universal ballet

Don't try to hold on
There's nothing to cling to
If you find someone
Remember they're falling with you
So trust the cycles of time
And don't be afraid to continue

What am I searching for?
You're looking too
Is this why people start wars?
If only they knew
There's nothing to fight over
You know it's true

Base life on fulfilment
And the simple pleasantries
And try to recognize this insant
Time has granted you and me

So keep your gold
And keep your steel
Those things are cold
They cannot feel
Blue skys above
Green grass below
There's plenty love
Outside of your window

Don't fret about money
It doesn't matter what people think
As long as you're happy
Then you're dancing in sinc

And when we're dead and gone
Maybe they'll sing our names
But the cycle will go on
And there'll be more to take our place

[Anonymous No.2978207,1]

>tfw /lit/ is down and you're too lazy to pick up a book and read

[Anonymous No.2978208]

Really gets redundant quick-like. Babby's first optimistic nihilism?

[Anonymous No.2978209]

>>2978208
Thanks for the input.

And yes, this is babby's first optimistic nihilism.

[Anonymous No.2978212]

>>2978209

Sounds as profound as a tween angst song. You're pretty bad at this, but you can only go up from here... cause there is nothing below you.

[Anonymous No.2978214]

I feel bossed around. I mean don't tell me what to do. I understand the poem's voice is talking to you yourself as well but "You're looking too" and "You know it's true" Just try not to come off as answerman/lady, the guy/lady with my answers.

[Anonymous No.2978215]

>>2978212
I'll be famous, you'll see. You'll all see!