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2536247 No.2536247 [Reply] [Original]

rate my poem
i feel lonely, blue.

choked.
choked.
yellow.
choked.

dry.
red.

>> No.2536271

10/10 best poem ever

>> No.2536278

Summa cum laude. You are the poetry master

>> No.2536289

I like the color-coding; I dislike the minimalism: reads like it was written by a computer. I need some more texture to begin to feel anything.

>> No.2536291

>>2536289
>>2536278
>>2536271
>>2536247
Samefagging your own shitty thread, OP?

>> No.2536305

289 was definitely not the OP. I know this because I posted 289, and guess what: I'm not the OP.

>> No.2536313

concrete jaguar, slowly moving. wish.

>> No.2536315

really pathetique picture looks like a 6/10 is trying to be a model with shitty lighting and a mid range shirt

>> No.2536316

>>2536305
Nice try OP!!

Also nice poem op
10/10
I laughed, I cried, it moved me, and at the end I was a better person

>> No.2536353

bump

>> No.2536992

I liked the choked part because it was like choked.

10/10

>> No.2537018

No one cares you silly narcissistic cocksucker.

>> No.2537019

jesus the samefagging in here it out of control.
fuck your shit minimalist poetry.
learn how to use words.

>> No.2537021

It's sooo good.

If I run a website where I rated poems I would rate this poem 7.9 which puts it on the same level as Mirrorings - Foreign Body album which is a good album so you are doing good and should keep doing what you're doing.

If you released a chapbook I would buy it, but if you released a paperback collection of poetry, I would probably buy it, but only used.

>> No.2537022

Kill yourself

>> No.2539119

bump

>> No.2539127

i wrote a poem to explain my feelings on OPs poem

i feel choked

choked
choked
choked

green
purple