Straight form the moleskin

[N No.2450351]

My lastest mediocre stoned poem.
Trying to get back into writing. criticize it up, /lit/
Everyone see's it,
no one mentions it
more magnetizing than mesmerizing,
its gravity is indiscriminate.
Obviously poisonous,
but universally addictive
It's desirability spawns its despicableness
It nauseatingly draws them
like flies to a sticky bloody web
cries to stop them stop on deaf ears
attempts to dispel the allusion yield nothing
You though,
You see no fault in your deception
You will continue swallowing
Until you're swallowed.

[Anonymous No.2450378]

>>2450351
It's trite. My retarded niece can write better.

[Anonymous No.2450390]

crap. it doesn't even rhyme.

[Anonymous No.2450393]

>>2450390

Poetry doesn't have to always rhyme.
But yes, >>2450351 is pure shit. And the false modesty is just pathetic.

[Anonymous No.2450431]

>>2450351
>everyone see's it
>see's it
>see's