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19937228 No.19937228 [Reply] [Original]

That fruit fly again
On the screen and in my tea
Similar we are

>> No.19937239

This is unironically good poetry.

>> No.19937266
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19937266

>>19937239

>> No.19937270

I wrote a poem for this thread :)

Little Fly
Thy summers play,
My thoughtless hand
Has brush'd away.

Am not I
A fly like thee?
Or art not thou
A man like me?

For I dance
And drink & sing:
Till some blind hand
Shall brush my wing.

If thought is life
And strength & breath:
And the want
Of thought is death;

Then am I
A happy fly,
If I live,
Or if I die.

>> No.19937280

>>19937270
It's sonorous, but OPs actually resonated with me. Dont get ne wrong, impressive structuring but no emotion.

>> No.19938129

>>19937280
Mmm. Read a bit like an exercise, sorry anon. You have good command but now i think you need to foget it.
>>19937228
Did you consider
>Similar are we
To rhyme with tea?

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>>19937228
Simple and good. Thank you OP.

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>>19937280
>>19938129
I like to imagine that these posters are being completely sincere and have never actually read Blake and are unable to recognise a masterpiece when they see one. That would be such a hilarious joke, to imagine that people so illiterate are browsing are so-called “literature” board.

>> No.19938283

>>19938177

>> No.19938293

>>19937266
wrapped lip
Smiling wit
eyes a' plastered
alabaster

>> No.19938309

>>19938177
I thought it sounded familiar. I stand by what I >>19938129 said. A lot of the romantic stuff can begin to feel over worked after a while.

>> No.19939162

>>19937228
nice

>> No.19939167

>>19937228
Based Taoist.

>> No.19940515

For every love
I ever had
or ever will have
but a hand of a distance
for it's climax
and the end of it's existence

>> No.19941552

>>19937239
>>19937228
>Similar we are
Should be "Similar are we"

>> No.19941565

It's a smiley face
Yet not on this writers face
But amongst the beans

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>>19937228
My frying grill, far from customer's eyes, reminds me. The sizzle of the gristle is a buzzing drone, and the patties's slaps a swat. Fry away, fly away, but either way I'm a putrid thing in Mickey D's.

>> No.19941880

>>19941552
Except that just turns it into engrish.