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[Anonymous No.1992608]

Banner,
blue
paradigmatic
cut,
new fashion
flip flops
over
frown
feedbag,
sitdown,
ticket.

Mind,
sterile
plastic
shelter,
carafe
clichéd
casket
twist
don´t think
thirsty?
Drink.


What are your thoughts on this?

[Rangaha !KJKZ7n2h3I No.1992615]

>>1992613
I've failed
Stopping* lines

[Rangaha !KJKZ7n2h3I No.1992613]

Skipping
Lines
Doesn't
Make
It
Poetry

[Anonymous No.1992623]

Noun,
adjective,
lofty adjective,
vague verb,
adjective noun,
preposition then new line because this is poetry
etc. etc.

It looks like you wrote this off the top of your head in about 2 minutes then clicked "submit." I give it a 1/10, just because you have a pulse.

[Anonymous No.1992638]

>>1992623
I was actually brain storming and trying to get the words for what exactly I was thinking about and how it felt.
If I were to progress this style and it was more polished,how would you feel about it?

[Anonymous No.1992650]

>>1992638
You mean if you were to actually write a poem instead of this garbage?

Well, I'd have to see the poem and not this garbage, wouldn't I?

[Anonymous No.1992660]

>>1992650
yes, I meant that. I was talking about the flow, the bouncing idea in it. You don´t have to be a dick about just because you´re anon

[Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ No.1992662]

>>1992613
Finnegan's

Is it

?

Even
fun?
Can't


imagine

[Anonymous No.1992683]

>>1992638
who are your favorite poets

don't say e.e. cummings

[Anonymous No.1992684]

>>1992608

ok ... if you insist, though ...

btw, cute kid.

[Anonymous No.1992700]

>>1992683
I don´t read a lot of poetry but, Ammons, John Donne and Poe. I get more Inspired by music though.

[Anonymous No.1992764]

>mfw

[Anonymous No.1992799]

>>1992700

Well, if it's like anything, it's like Tape for the Turn of the Year by Ammons. Which I like. But it's not as good as the long-lined Ammons like Garbage or I Went to the Summit.

[Anonymous No.1992845]

[Anonymous No.1992856]

>>1992700
>I don't read a lot of poetry
ugh

come back after you've studied what other people have written

[Anonymous No.1992876]

For some reason, I liked it because I feel like I totally understand your train of thought. I don't know. It seemed pretty honest. But I like the things in your head, OP, and I would want to see how your brainstorming took shape in whatever else you were writing.

Here's a cat.

[Anonymous No.1992890]

>>1992876
thank you for your respond. Would you care to analyse it more? or tell me what it made you think about?

[Anonymous No.1992920]

>>1992890
Well, the second stanza really reminds me of my own thought process when I try to do these sorts of 'train of thought' exercises in writing. It's really hard to both record your immediate thoughts while trying to block out the fact that you're recording it, your hand is moving, and you're putting down letters! The "clichéd" and the "don't think" in your poem really pinpoint the difficultness of this kind of writing for me. I identified with it.

That's why I said it seemed 'honest'--I'm not sure if you intended it or whatever. For me, these kinds of poems are really fun to read when you think you know where the author is coming from, in a way, and you can try to pick apart their thought process.

[Anonymous No.1992937]

>>1992920
I´ve painted more than I have written so my creative process revolves around trowing out ideas and then balancing them out.
For me the two stanzas are opposites fighting, but unsure who they are. I was trying to capture that moment of inner battle when mind is going really fast.

[Anonymous No.1992948]

>>1992937
The top one could also represent authority being bent by freedom. And the latter freedom wondering if it should keep fighting or give up follow the authority.

[Anonymous No.1992978]

>>1992623