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1930685 No.1930685 [Reply] [Original]

Hey, /Lit/, can you grade my poem ?

My Team Is Red Hot

My dick is red hot
Your dick is diddly dot

My politics red hot
Your politics diddly-plot

My president's red hot
your president's diddly-blot

My land is red hot
Your land is diddly-knot

My nation's red hot
Your nation's diddly not

My cosmos red hot
Your cosmos diddly iddly squat

>> No.1930704
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1930704

You see, OP is trying to take the traditional boasting of Epic poetry and put it to an almost childish, Dadaist manner. For example:

My land is red hot
Your land is diddly-knot

Here he is commenting on the eviction of the Native Americans in the 18th century in a rather ironic way, I think. "Red hot" could mean, filled with "Reds", or Native Americans. He counters this by saying it is actually "NOT", as in, the Americans stole the land that was his from time beginning.

>> No.1930703

Williamsian in its breathtaking terseness.

>> No.1930728

bump up

>> No.1930741
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>>1930704
I don't know. I see it as overt apologetics for bestiality.

>My land is red hot

"Land" is used here as a reference to female genitalia. It is "red hot" in a dual sense: (1) the vagina's fleshy red hue (not to mention the blood it purges on the wedding bed) as well as (2) the vagina-proprietor's feelings of sexual arousal (here the poet deigns to the colloquial: "hotness").

>Your land is diddly-knot

If we carry the logic of the metaphor further, we can unpack this line to mean the "land" of a dog's genitals--more specifically the flesh-knot of its penis, allegedly a source of intense sexual pleasure for she whose vagina it penetrates, or (again more colloquially) "diddles."

>> No.1930747

>>1930741

I'm gay, so this has nothing to do with women.

>> No.1930751

op here. >>1930747 isn't me

>> No.1930753

Guys, what if it's just about peppers?

>> No.1930756

what a stirring imagistic and thematic balustrade of emotion

>> No.1930766
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>>1930756
>>1930756

>> No.1930789

Nice poem OP !

>> No.1930802

It follows the life of an average American Conservative.

Red Team- Raised early by his father to love the Boston Red Sox, an American baseball team

Red dick- At adolescence, the man brought up with conservative values is easily aroused and full of hormones. "Red-hot" represents both the figurative "popping of cherries" (which signifies youth) and genital herpes (which signifies promiscuity).

Politics- This one is obvious. He lives in a red (Republican) state. "Hot" here serves as a characteristic of the state's climate. Texas, perhaps?

President- President Bush is elected at this time of the conservative's life.

Land- The land being referred to is Iraq. Iraq is called a "land" in this case and not "country" or "nation" because those two terms imply a human population. Republicans in this poem are uncaring people who only care about Iraq's "land" (oil) and not about its people. "Red" represents the nation's blood-stained sands, and "Hot" represents both the nation's climate and the volatility of the population.

Nation- Just before the 2008 elections. The conservative is sure that the American people will vote Republican and elect Senator John McCain.

Cosmos- The conservative dies before the 2008 election. He re-joins the cosmos and, even still, characterizes it with his partisan stance. Truly, the two-party system in the United States will never die.

The repetitive structure and childish, sing-song meter satirize partisan politics in America as nothing more than school-yard taunting and bullying.

>> No.1930876 [DELETED] 
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1930876

My team is red hot by (Allen Ginsberg)

>> No.1930882

>>1930802
I <3 this post.

>> No.1930887

>>1930882
>>1930802
Could you BE any more obvious?

>> No.1930894

>>1930887
Nope, completely different posters.

>> No.1930901

>>1930894
>>1930897
Could you BE any more obvious?

>> No.1930898

>>1930894
That you jumped to that conclusion before he did is proof enough of your samefaggotry.

>> No.1930897
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>>1930887
>he doesn't know how to check for samefagging.

>> No.1930911

>>1930901
>>1930898
We're different people, I swear. ;_;

>> No.1930917

>>1930911
Not them, but come on dude.

>> No.1930918

>>1930898
>before he did
>implying two different people
>implying i may not just samefag this thread up now for the fun of it

>> No.1930920

>>1930911
I apologize for getting you into this. This is very bizarre. Truth be told I am
>>1930704

>> No.1930921

>>1930918
Notice how your post times are always one minute away from each other? On this slow-as-fuck board, you are obviously samefagging:

>>1930894
>>1930897

>>1930911
>>1930918

You wrote a long post, didn't the attention you needed, so you shilled self-affirmation. Disgusting.

>> No.1930922

>>1930920
>>1930911
Could you BE any more obvious?

>> No.1930929

>>1930921
I've had this thread up for awhile now. I just replied like an hour late to revive it. But shit, I give up.

>> No.1930935

>>1930921
:( Believe what you must.

I'm just happy someone liked what I wrote.

>> No.1930937

>>1930929
>>1930935
This is getting a little ridiculous.

>> No.1930944

Everyone in this thread is the same person. Discuss.

>> No.1930946

>>1930944
Jesus Christ this is a phenomenal fucking post. So shapely and innocent and callipygian.

>> No.1930950
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We are all... One poster.

>> No.1930980

>>1930950
also, this thread has enlightened me. We are all anonymous, tripcodes are just an illusion. Everyone who got pissed off in this thread will find themselves agreeing with each other in another thread. How can we distinguish from one another. if we are all one? It's impossible. There are subtle clues but nothing definitive. We can only grasp at the idea of egos, personality, identity. But it is much easier to accept the true reality of all beings: the cosmos is a thread, and we are ALL samefagging.

>> No.1931807
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1931807

THIS POEM WAS WRITTEN BY ALLEN GINSBERG. LOL !

>> No.1931817

>>1931807
>Delete the first time you posted it because nobody cared about what you wrote.
>Re-post it at the end of the thread to make you seem like a master troll.

You're fucking pathetic.