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19015134 No.19015134 [Reply] [Original]

Poorly written unfortunately. Interesting concept but the writing is very amateurish. Changes tense from past to present within the same sentence. Characters are like cardboard cutouts that speak in cliches. Constant references to so many books and poems out of nowhere.

Sorry to the author but this is really awful. Best to try just a simple story without all the over the top quotes and philosophical stuff. It comes off as trying to be deeper than it is. Hopefully the author can work on creating realistic characters who's speech comes across naturally too. I wish the author luck.

>> No.19015361

>>19015134
>Interesting concept
I read the whole thing and liked it in a semi-ironic way but I have barely idea how to even describe the "concept" in a coherent way.

"A man's son gets eaten by a crocodile, and one year later he suffers from a series of nightmarish crocodile apparitions" is really the closest I can think of, but that doesn't even describe the half of it or account for any of its weird twists.