/lit/ - Literature

[Anonymous No.1894515]

hey /lit/, i've been trying out poetry for a few years and wonder what you guys will think of it. heres a first draft of a poem i wrote in about 30 minutes.

also, what do you guys think of musicians and their lyrics compared to poets and their poetry? do you think a well made poem can be made into a good song?

“Judas”
As I wake with a throbbing body,
A weak heart from broken faith,
I see you in the distance saying,
I don’t what else to do.

Pinned up like an insect on display,
Left for all to see.
And you say, this isn’t what I wanted.
Your hands were the ones that tied mine.

I am the heretic, and you are Judas.
Turn away from the scene of the crime
And don’t choke on the smoke,
That you left behind.

[Anonymous No.1895683]

Best anime of whatever year it's from

[Anonymous No.1895695]

>>1895683
mhm, won the japanese media festival award of 2010, first anime to ever win that award.

now back to what i was talking about

[Anonymous No.1895698]

>>1895695
If you mean it's the first TV show to win it, yeah, I guess it was. Never realized that..

[Anonymous No.1895711]

what anime is that anime that you said is the best anime

[Anonymous No.1895728]

>>1895711
It's The Tatami Galaxy. It's really funny and intellgient. Great characters. Go see it

[Anonymous No.1895732]

>>1895698
oh no way, i thought it was just the first anime, not tv show. nice
>>1895711
The Tatami Galaxy. my favorite anime by far

will anyone care to look at what i want looked at?

[Anonymous No.1895840]

oh yeah song lyrics are poems

[Anonymous No.1895872]

>>1895840
i know that, im asking if you think a well made poem can be made into a good song. like, could you see T.S. Eliot's "The lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock" being put well to music?

also, any critiques on my first draft?