Write what is on your mind

[Anonymous No.18645644]

Write whatever you feel like, Anon. A short story, a character introduction, your thoughts, or any kind of ideas you have had.

[Anonymous No.18645668]

>>18645644
I was upset earlier, but after imagining myself exercising and then doing some chin-ups, I felt much better. Exercise is wonderful.
I heard that Roman patricians like Julius Caesar exercised every single day from the time they were young. Does anyone know what routines they did, and how much strength, speed, and endurance the average Roman patrician had built up by the age of 30?

[Anonymous No.18645671]

>>18645644
Tfw like a Japanese comic book about a man with a chainsaw for a face more than most literature

[Anonymous No.18645675]

I've lost all hope and I want to regain hope but I've lost all hope to succeed in regaining the hope I've lost.

[Anonymous No.18645783]

Big part of my personality is just about being racist.

[Anonymous No.18645860]

>>18645671
Based Chainsaw man

MAPPA’s animation is gonna be lit

[Anonymous No.18645903]

Good old women are the most based people possible.
Bad old women are the biggest, most vile and useless pieces of shit.
I wish it was easier to tell them apart but they all look alike on the surface.

[Anonymous No.18645907]

Big part of my personality is smoking weed

[Anonymous No.18646878]

What is the x-tudo of the US? That kind of sandwich that has practically everywhere and it is usually the biggest one.

[Anonymous No.18646912]

Every woman I have ever had any affection for outside my family just want me to fuck them. Every time I tried to talk to them as anything other than a sexual object they started hating me. Why can't I be in love with you? Why can't I be in love with you AND fuck you? I want to do it that way, not the other way around. I refuse to fuck you until we've been in love for at least a week.

[Anonymous No.18646978]

This is something I was working on, I only started writing this year so critisim is welcome.

The hedera ivy could be seen clawing its way up the hardwood tree. Sinking its parasitic tendrils into the wood, covering the base in a sickening green blanket of leaves, and instinctively groping upwards towards the sun. In a couple months time, one would have trouble even seeing the bark of the poor tree. Not that anyone would look. To most passersby, the ivy will just look like a tasteless overcoat, but in reality, more akin to a straight jacket or even a living noose. For the hedera will strangle out the tree’s nutrients and water until death. Of course, the hardwood may, fortunately, survive as a crippled victim. However, equally likely, the added weight of the vines could cause the tree to crash down dramatically in the next storm it endures. If that happens people will futilely wonder how a tree standing so tall could fall so hard. Oh if only they noticed the vines but people moving so fast hardly have time to witness a murder so slow. I would be doubtful they even notice the ivy as the tree lay before them dead. Who can blame them though? It's not like the tree could vocalize its pain. To them, it always stood just like the rest of its brothers. To them, the ivy is as equally part of the tree as its leaves. Truly the only ones that would notice the tragedy are the hardwood’s healthy brothers. However, they can only offer condolences as their fixed branches can never reach down to help.

[Anonymous No.18646999]

>>18646978
Looks ok. ;is this ivy a real thing or did you made that up?

[Anonymous No.18647006]

>>18645644
I am increasingly disturbed by the existence of animals
>what if there were people but they were like really dumb and monstrously deformed and some are tiny or huge and they just run around the wilderness screeching incoherently
I mean that's ridiculous yet that's basically the situation

[Anonymous No.18647007]

>>18646978
Is this supposed to tie into something that happens later or stand on its own?

[Anonymous No.18647054]

>>18646999
Yes it is real, Hedera Ivy is also known as English Ivy.

>>18647007
It is the opening of a book about a parasitic entity attacking a small town, but I wrote the paragraph to stand on its own.

[Anonymous No.18647074]

>>18647006
Read Plato. You're not far off the mark

[Anonymous No.18647111]

>>18646912
>at least a week
Oh no no no...

[Anonymous No.18647113]

>>18647074
What does Plato have to say about this? Doesnt Plato think animals all have their own ideal form or whatever? Seems to be contrary to the way the idea appeared to me where they're all just mutated humans

[Anonymous No.18647123]

>>18647054
Personally I think you're showing all your cards in the first paragraph. It's not bad, I just think it should be broken up. Can this metaphor be shown piece by piece to acknowledge the progression of the parasite? Can characters notice it a little at a time to come to understand that the threat is real?

[Anonymous No.18647160]

>>18647123
That might be a smarter way to incorperate the metaphor novel. I originally planned to just have it as a tone setter but having the tree with vines on it be a reflection of the town could be better. Thanks for the advice.

[Anonymous No.18647168]

>>18647113
It's either in Phaedo or Crito (reasonably short dialogues). He talks about how certain men and women with certain proclivities become certain animals after their death, depending on their actions in this life. Similar to Buddhism's rebirths except Plato guesses at which type of people become which animal. But yeah, his philosophy is more complicated than everything simply being or having a form. That would be closer to Aristotle.

[Anonymous No.18647169]

>>18647160
Bro what the fuck is this image you've posted

[Anonymous No.18647171]

>>18647123
>>18647054
Yeah, don't be so explicit with the parasite metaphor so early on. Also, I'd suggest actually specifying the kind of tree. Hardwood is non-specific but also feels somehow more "specialized" than if you just said hickory or whatever.

[Anonymous No.18647181]

>>18647160
no problem, can I also suggest getting away from a 3rd person omniscient narrator to maybe 1st person? or maybe 3rd person but "camera centered" on each successive person? If you're going to go into microscopic detail its better if its "somebody's" microscopic detail as opposed to "your" microscopic detail.It's way more interesting if a character notices something tiny than if the all knowing narrator points it out to the audience.

[Anonymous No.18647210]

>>18645644
I reprobated one of my exams yesterday, therefore will have to repeat that class. It sucks.
I have been having trouble sleeping during these last 2 or 3 months, and my head aches all the time.
I feel weak and masturbate way too much. I feel dirty because of that, I feel disgusting. Wish I could get rid of all my deviated sexual desires. Wish I could be pure.
I have been having constant violent thoughts too during the last few months.

[Anonymous No.18647224]

>>18647210
Have you gone to a doctor, anon? And get some headache meds too. My life improved dramatically after I started taking those. I'm trying to not be too dependent on them, but it seems like it is the best option to me.

[Anonymous No.18647245]

>>18647168
Interesting. I shudder to think what manner of beleaguered slug I will become for my sins

[Anonymous No.18647261]

>>18647245
Chances are if you're a relatively normal person with a few kinks you'll just get reborn as a Mexican. Not as dramatic as you'd think probably.

[Anonymous No.18648253]

>>18645860
Very worried for it desu, if it looks as good as the trailer then it'll be GOATed

[Anonymous No.18649437]

>>18646978
not a fan of some of the sentences, but the overall feel is effective. for instance,
>Of course, the hardwood may, fortunately, survive as a crippled victim.
weird that youre editorializing in the first half, it should have a clear transition to doing so starting around
>Oh if only they noticed
as if the narrator can no longer maintain his adjectival disparagement but otherwise detached description, and is bursting out in a more explicit lamentation.

just my 2cents, dont have any qualifications though.

[Anonymous No.18649459]

what is on your mind

[Anonymous No.18649522]

>>18647006
Typical ignorant bugman reductionism

[Anonymous No.18649699]

>>18649522
T. Naked wilderness shrieker

[Anonymous No.18649732]

I am very suddenly repulsed by all the senseless arguing and posturing that takes place here and in other parts of the internet. What a tremendous waste of time, to spew bile for no reason. I know I will be back, because it's fun sometimes, but I feel like I'm seeing this clearly for the first time in years

[Anonymous No.18649785]

The price of a book should be based on the printed material not for the "knowledge" it contains.

[Anonymous No.18649847]

>>118645644

------------ Exurbia Familiar -----------


Via charm
Or scent lush as fields
Planetary in August sweep

I prevail beyond belief,
The favorite every neighbor
Assumes the way prolific flora does--

Shining in the silence of ecstasy
Like imagined star clusters,
The gorgeous reality

Of horizon-spanning wheeled plateaux,
Hybrid playthings, technomusic,
Peace completely attained--

The fantastic sleep of lawn spectacles, cottonwood towers, cumulonimbus architecture--

Queen Ann's lace in bronze waves of accidental grain, forgetably dependable cars
Whispering by, as if nature meant

For us to live this well.
I

[Anonymous No.18649987]

Holy shit. How could you offer a job position and say an offer will come soon and not follow through with that? Just tell me I didn't get the position or whatever other bullshit happened so that I'm in the know. Yes, I'm frustrated.

[Anonymous No.18650817]

WHEN CARTHAGE HAD FALLEN TO ROMANIC PESTS
HER ELEPHANTS BLEEDED AND TUMBLED
«MAKE SHUT THE GATES, LEST WE GIFT THEM REST!»
HAD SHOUTED HASDRUBAL DOWN FROM HIS TOWER

BUT LATE WAS THE HOUR, AND CARTHAGE DIMINISHED
AND THUS SET THE ROMAN HIS FOOT ON ITS SOIL
IN VIOLENCE IT HAD BEGUN, AND THEN FINISHED
AND SO HAD TURNED MOST FERTILE EARTH INTO DUST

THE ROMAN GAVE IN TO HIS LUST FOR THE KILLING,
HIS PASSION TO WOMEN AND CHILDREN ALIKE
MURDERED A BROTHER, AND ALSO HIS SIBLING
STOLE THUS THE MONUMENTS OUT OF THE PALACE

PONDER THIS, ROME! SEE THY OWN FAULTS!
FOR THEE POISONED CARTHAGE, WITH THY EVIL SALT!

FUCK ROMANS

[POETRY ANON !!DvOOpyWgfMl No.18650856]

WHEN CARTHAGE HAD FALLEN TO ROMANIC PESTS
HER ELEPHANTS BLEEDED AND TUMBLED
«MAKE SHUT THE GATES, LEST WE GIFT THEM REST!»
HAD SHOUTED HASDRUBAL DOWN FROM HIS TOWER

BUT LATE WAS THE HOUR, AND CARTHAGE DIMINISHED
AND THUS SET THE ROMAN HIS FOOT ON ITS SOIL
IN VIOLENCE IT HAD BEGUN, AND THEN FINISHED
AND SO HAD TURNED MOST FERTILE EARTH INTO DUST

THE ROMAN GAVE IN TO HIS LUST FOR THE KILLING,
HIS PASSION TO WOMEN AND CHILDREN ALIKE
MURDERED A BROTHER, AND ALSO HIS SIBLING
STOLE THUS THE MONUMENTS OUT OF THE PALACE

PONDER THIS, ROME! SEE THY OWN FAULTS!
FOR THOU POISONED CARTHAGE, WITH THINE EVIL SALTS!

FUCK ROMANS

[Anonymous No.18650964]

>>18646912
>at least a week
Whore.

[Anonymous No.18651005]

I started skateboarding again and its a lot of fun
I stopped smoking weed for good
Seeing an alcohol counsellor whose methods I know cant help me but it helps having someone to talk with about it
I try to read more but my attention span is fucked
I ate ryebread today
My feet hurt
I kinda want a low maintenance gf
Still no real friends but lhave adopted and learned to live with it

[POETRY ANON !!DvOOpyWgfMl No.18651032]

WHEN CARTHAGE HAD FALLEN TO ROMANIC PESTS
HER ELEPHANTS BLEEDED AND TUMBLED
«MAKE SHUT THE GATES, LEST WE GIVE THEM REST!»
HAD SHOUTED HASDRUBAL DOWN FROM HIS TOWER

BUT LATE WAS THE HOUR, AND CARTHAGE DIMINISHED
AND THUS SET THE ROMAN HIS FOOT ON ITS SOIL
IN VIOLENCE IT HAD BEGUN, AND THEN FINISHED
AND SO HAD TURNED MOST FERTILE EARTH INTO DUST

THE ROMAN GAVE IN TO HIS LUST FOR THE KILLING,
HIS PASSION TO WOMEN AND CHILDREN ALIKE
MURDER'D A BROTHER, AND ALSO HIS SIBLING
STOLE THUS THE MONUMENTS OUT OF THE PALACE

PONDER THIS, ROME! SEE THINE OWN FAULTS!
FOR THOU POISON'D CARTHAGE, WITH THINE EVIL SALTS!

FUCK ROMANS

[Anonymous No.18651045]

>>18645644

Gabby. I wish you would go by Gabrielle.
White legs and sad lips and all the things that make any other have a better opinion of you.
I have another redhead at home. Gabby if only you could make it two.

[Anonymous No.18651059]

>>18646912
>Every time I tried to talk to them as anything other than a sexual object
What do you say?

[Anonymous No.18651111]

>>18651005

Just smoke some weed maaaaan.
It's the cure Pzifer doesn't want you to know about maaaan.
Its all natural maaaan.
Its just a plant broooo.

[Anonymous No.18651117]

why are there two of these threads

[Anonymous No.18651129]

>>18651111
brhhhhhh look at dem chrispy TRIPZ aaahahahahah CHECKD
exaclty right, just a plant dude, aint nothing wrong with smoking them godly errrbs