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17802734 No.17802734 [Reply] [Original]

Death is here already. It is all around you. The whole world is a graveyard, stuffed with corpses. Nature is a painted catacomb. The clearest pond is swirling with rot and the soil is corpses. Dead, dried, compounded corpses. Families, generations, billions of years of creatures that became corpses, then became creatures, then became corpses. Breathe in the air. That same air has been in the lungs of thousands of men before you. Men who are dead. You thought you were the first? It was in the lungs and blood of lepers, starving children, men who stood on the gallows, waiting their turns. They found and used and lost it long before you gulped it down. Can you catch the scent? Do you have the nose? The very air reeks of death.

>> No.17802752

Thank goodness. Imagine being immortal. Imagine the smell

>> No.17802757

is it just me or is there a sudden influx of schizoposting on every board

>> No.17802761

>>17802757
why is this schizoposting

>> No.17802764

Not how air works idiot.

>> No.17802769

>>17802734
Not bad OP

>> No.17802782

>>17802764
>cannot comphrehend the implications of cycles
>>17802769
ty

>> No.17802805
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>>17802752
>Imagine the smell

>> No.17803211

>>17802757
not that it's very good, but this is in no way schizoposting, you absolute nonce

>> No.17803294

>>17803211
write us paragraph mister critic

>> No.17803314

>>17802734
I like it. Very nice, Anon.

>> No.17803320

>>17802734
DREAM

>> No.17803330

>>17802734
Pretty far away from being good. Generally it lacks a great idea but you also want to stay away from being cringe edgelord when writing heavy existential themes. Your text lacks greatness and edges the edgelord feeling because you have a few cringe sentences. 3/10 execution on a 5/10 idea, would reject but say that you have a lot of work to do if you are serious about this.

>> No.17803360

>>17803314
ty
>>17803330
it's okay to share your own writing, anon. don't worry if you feel your "text lacks greatness and edges the edgelord feeling" or anything like that. you can just write a nice little idea and post it. it can edge whatever feelings you feel, or it can edge feelings you don't but are trying to capture. this isn't a hub for literary agents or a writing competition with major prizes on the line. it's just a silly anonymous messageboard. let your ideas go wild!

>> No.17803429

>>17802734
you should write lyrics for a black metal band