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Currently writing a story about man who meets the MOST beautiful woman in the world, perfect personality / looks / feet / handwriting / smell, and goes into a coma. He’s lost his ability to speak and when he does he just mumbles a bunch before fainting. She decides to take care of him in her home but the hospital denies her request because her house is infested with ants. He eventually wakes up declares his love for her right before he’s sworn into office as the president of Iceland. Any suggestions in regards to making it better, further reading?

>> No.15897153
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>>15897123
You should definitely read this, there’s also a lot of infographs on it. The prose is amazing and the way the character develops through each chapter, it’s ammazziing

>> No.15897209

Retarded good. I would love to read your shit.

>> No.15897249
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>>15897123
I'll read that shit.

>> No.15897330

>she’s the Most beautiful woman
Can’t wait to read it

>> No.15897835

Based

>> No.15897968

>>15897123
What do the most perfect feet in the world look like?

>> No.15897974

>>15897249
name?

>> No.15899057

>>15897968
Like hers

>> No.15899221

>>15897123
post pics of your vision of her feet, just trying to get an idea where you're coming from

>> No.15900069

>>15899221
Bumping this

>> No.15900203

>>15897974
https://www.instagram.com/staryuukiii/

>> No.15900222

>>15900203
is that a fucking tranny

>> No.15900227

>>15897968
>>15899221

yeah bumping as well, OP you need to do research in this subject then show us

>> No.15900240

>>15900222
>he likes women who don't take HRT

>> No.15900472

>>15897123
Imagine if women obsessed over men even 1/10 as much as men obsess over women.

Currently writing a story about a woman who meets the MOST handsome man in the world, perfect personality / looks / hair / voice / smell, and goes into a coma. She’s lost her ability to speak and when she does she just mumbles a bunch before fainting.

look how fucking pathetic and tumblr tier that sounds. jesus fucking christ men are cringe and subhuman.

>> No.15900493

Unless you are South American you'll never pull off such a dumb idea

>> No.15900503

>>15900472
Ever heard of the romance novel industry, anon? It's quite literally this and it sells better than almost anything else currently published

>> No.15900513

>>15900472
woman have an entire extremely popular genre of book that is literally just 'woman meets MOST handsome man in the world, blah blah' except he's often a criminal or a vampire or something.

>> No.15900531

>>15900472
Imagine all the peeepo-ole

>> No.15900542

>>15900493
I am Canadian

>> No.15900560

>>15897123
Sounds good so far, but I don't quite understand one thing. Are you saying that, while in coma, he, when trying to speak, mumbles and the faints? I think that by definition you can neither mumble nor fait while already in a coma. So you might have to specify his medical condition differently/more coherently. Other than that it sounds like an engaging story.

>> No.15900612

>>15900560
Thank you so much

>> No.15900625

>>15900560
Maybe it is a magical coma

>> No.15900648

>>15900625
I was thinking about playing with the word coma and comma, also a lot of commas during the coma

>> No.15900685

>>15900648
That sounds extremely annoying but good luck

>> No.15900733

>>15900648
Based

>> No.15900768

Look for written shit by murderers who are obsessive with women and take that as an inspiration for describing the perfect woman.

>> No.15900784

>>15897123
The Abortion: An historical romance, by Brautigan, features a female character who keeps killing people by accident because she's too hot. It's also about being a good librarian.

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>>15900784
I don’t like it

>> No.15901132

>>15901124
Because of the cave seepage?

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>>15899221

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>>15897968
probably breadface's feet tbhw erybody

>> No.15901163

>>15901132
Not exactly. You see she’s making all these “accidents” and she’s a librarian? Your telling me there’s some library where all the books are in the wrong place? I’m gonna go looking forever, reading barcode, before I get to the book I want to read? By some clumsy murderer? And I feel bad for her. No one should be described as an abortion anon
Just my 2pesos

>> No.15901174

>>15901163
I see you haven't read the book. She's not a librarian. She's a character who comes into the library. It's a pretty simple book but, given your response, it might be too complex for your tastes.

>> No.15901178

>>15901174
It certainly is