Hello /lit/. I have translated a poem of mine from french to english and I would like to know if it makes any sense, as english is but a second language to me. Any help would be appreciated. https://jedeuxpoints.wordpress.com/2020/02/24/the-hollows-of-the-world/

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Anonymous Wed Mar 25 23:54:44 2020 No.14953227 [Reply] [Original]

Hello /lit/.
I have translated a poem of mine from french to english and I would like to know if it makes any sense, as english is but a second language to me. Any help would be appreciated.

https://jedeuxpoints.wordpress.com/2020/02/24/the-hollows-of-the-world/

>>	Anonymous Wed Mar 25 23:57:59 2020 No.14953249 I think you could cut out the middle three stanzas but otherwise I kinda love it. Good job.

>>	Anonymous Thu Mar 26 00:08:57 2020 No.14953282 >>14953249 Yeah, I tried to remain concise but there is just too much to say. Otherwise the ending seems out of place, I think. The suicide just feels off if there isn't enough substance to justify it.

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