/lit/ - Literature

[Anonymous No.12935114]

Post your short story ideas. It's not like they're going anywhere.

[Anonymous No.12935151]

Ant colony starts using wooden tools and begins developing their society even more; eventually discover how to mine iron and set up little ant mines. Since ants are so small even the tiniest bit of iron gives them hundreds of tools and gear, and eventually they start foraging for bottlecaps to melt in their little ant furnaces. Don't know how its gonna end bc it's not even on paper, just an idea i had floating in my head.

[Anonymous No.12935159]

>>12935151
Anon, I want to read this right now, get writing.

[Anonymous No.12935161]

a nigga gets clapped with the fofo. the end

[Anonymous No.12935194]

>>12935151
I'm going to play around this idea for a writing exercise, it seems fun and not being able to write dialogue makes an interesting handicap. Thanks anon!
(Also, I won't publish it, don't worry)

[Anonymous No.12935201]

I'm gonna lurk this thread for story ideas and then not credit you for them
ty in advance anons

[Anonymous No.12935235]

>>12935194
Do whatever you want, I wouldn't have posted it here had I not wanted others to know about it. Post it to a critique thread if you ever make it.

[Anonymous No.12935292]

pige

[Anonymous No.12935692]

>>12935201
No you wont. Not because I have some faith in your moral fiber, but because I know someone too lazy to even come up with a throwaway idea for a few pages is too lazy to even write anything at all. But ebin maymay bro, upboatted!

[Anonymous No.12936618]

A bitter incel lives in a college neighborhood. It is hot so he is forced to keep the window open and listen to his neighbors (fratboys) partying and fucking chicks and having a good time.

He gets so bitter that one evening, after the frat boys play Old Town Road by Lil Nas feat Billy Ray Cyrus 5 times in a row he goes out to best buy and gets the biggest speaker they have. then he puts it in his window and plays Old Town Road on repeat top volume day in day out for 5 months.

[Anonymous No.12936637]

>>12936618
what does that do to his psyche

[Anonymous No.12936707]

Angels and demons battling eachother. Humans and aliens get caught in the crossfire. Very epical.

[Anonymous No.12937561]

Pige

[Anonymous No.12937563]

>>12935151
Same thing happens in Simak's City

[Anonymous No.12937567]

american porno cameraman is hired by a JAV studio; culture shock ensues.

[Anonymous No.12937634]

>>12937561
That's a tapir

[Anonymous No.12937665]

>>12937634
pige

[Anonymous No.12937671]

three little piges and the big bad wolf

[Anonymous No.12937935]

>>12935114
I'm more likely to write comic but this is how it will go
>a young man starts dodging his family and responsibility and one day decides to start traveling like a hobo
>he sees a lot of horrendous thing living on the streets and becomes insensitive to it
>he became an even bigger piece of shit by starting to do the petty crime, he dropped his guard, thinks he is doing nothing wrong
>finally he killed somebody (or something equal to that), managed to escape, but barely
>he is confronted whit enormous guilt and starts to rethink his life
>gets help from the source he least expected, he also got some odd job

the rest I still need to think about
I don't know if I should do happy or sad or undefined ending

[Anonymous No.12938130]

Currently working on a story that has a more cosmic horror type of backstory.
Not sure what setting to use in the end but I want to make multiple stories that use the cosmic horror theme to it and move the bigger story along.

[Anonymous No.12938173]

>>12935114
A boy (Calvin) meets a tiger I will name hobbes. They will live through cute little adventures constantly learning little snippets of life wisdom mixed with sarcastic quips

[Anonymous No.12938180]

The Republic of Kekistan farms enough upvotes to trade valuble net currency. After setting up a parliament under the President, first territory is bought and later annexed, which causes geopolitic trouble. Kekistan forms alliances with other states of questioned status. Leaders of all countries have to adjust their policies.

[Anonymous No.12938194]

>>12935114
Protagonist wakes up in an abandoned city in the middle of a desert and proceeds to explore it

[Anonymous No.12938204]

>>12935151
tweak it into something different than vid below

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9xfWevkR2iI

[Anonymous No.12938216]

>>12938194
I honestly had a similar opening for one of the stories I've written in my free time, however in my case the protagonist was in space while in a stasis pod and fell down to earth a thousand years later when everything has gone to hell.
He has no memories of who he is or where he came from and has to travel through the remnants of human civilization which has become a blighted hellscape.

[Anonymous No.12938228]

>>12938216
Speaking of space, I also had another idea of someone waking up in an abandoned space station and exploring it that came to me after playing Alien Isolation

[Anonymous No.12938306]

>>12938228
That kind of reminds me of Moon, but it might be a nice twist to have someone wake up after a whole bunch of shit has gone down on a space station and he has to make sense of it all.
Makes me wonder how you'll keep that interesting and engaging to the reader when there isn't an active threat ?
Maybe he has to go around the station finding videologs or whatever to find out what happened ?

[Anonymous No.12938320]

>>12938306
>Makes me wonder how you'll keep that interesting and engaging to the reader when there isn't an active threat ?
Oh, it wouldn't really be a story, just a literary exercise in describing this empty station adrift into space

[Anonymous No.12938336]

>>12938320
Ah that makes much more sense, having nothing happen doesn't do much to engage the reader but it would be a nice excersise.

[Anonymous No.12938346]

>>12937935
I'd give it an ambiguous ending cos I'm a lazy fuck

[Anonymous No.12939437]

>>12938194
Sounds like a Conan story I read one time.....

[Anonymous No.12939449]

>>12939437
Really? Do you remember the title or any other information?

[Anonymous No.12939911]

Original Poster turned on his computer again as he did every morning. He wiped the crust from his eyes, using the spit dripping from his mouth to better extract the small, dried bits. Original poster opens his word document and reviews it. He closes it in frustration. As he expected, his work did not improve despite reading it again like he had for the past 5 months. With despair in his heart and gas building in his stomach, he opens Google chrome to visit his beloved literature board on 4chan. He gives himself a crusty, devious smile as he clicks the "New Thread" button with his decrepit and slimy fingers. "Your story bad, by the way" he writes, knowing that his only hope in life is to put down others with similar aspirations. The hole in his heart felt soothed, for the moment, by the blackness of his hate. He clicked the incognito tab and finished his ritual. Original Poster had done his dastardly deed for the day.

[Anonymous No.12940895]

>>12936637
makes him cum (the little death)

[Anonymous No.12941006]

it's like neon genesis evangelion but like... fuckin... like...

[Anonymous No.12941013]

>>12935151
That sounds fun as fuck. Get on with the writing I'm waiting.

[Anonymous No.12941347]

>>12939911
Anon, that's just an excerpt from my diary desu.

[Anonymous No.12941387]

>>12941347
And you let me steal it. Maybe you need to...level up, heh.

[Anonymous No.12941413]

Posting my short story cause the critique threads are ignoring me rn. It's probably going in the trunk so I need as much feedback as I can on it.
https://pastebin.com/h4BNUCVb

If ya'll don't want to read it the pitch is: a sleazy ghost hunter is hired by a family to find a missing kid in the forest. I pitched it originally as Jaws meets ghost busters. I imagined Bill Murray's Peter Venkman as Shaw's character Quint, telling a ghost story that changed his life forever.

[Anonymous No.12941415]

>>12935151
Do it please

[Anonymous No.12941431]

>>12941413
It sounds like it could be good from the pitch, but I honestly loathe it when people imagine popular Hollywood actors playing the characters in their story.

[Anonymous No.12941458]

>>12941431
When I wrote it I tried very hard to divert it from the films so I could avoid comparisons. Specifically how ghosts work and how they bust them. As far as the GB's description, I stopped thinking of him like that beyond conception stage. He'd probably look a little more like Quint, but there are some notable features included that wouldn't make any reader think of that at least.

[Anonymous No.12941462]

>>12941458
Either way, good luck. You have a decent base so far (decent can always turn into fantastic when fleshed out)

[Anonymous No.12941494]

>>12939911
kek

[Anonymous No.12942085]

>>12935114
An Invasion Of The Body-Snatchers told from the point-of-view of one of the snatchers, who not only retains vivid memories of his past bodily habitations & planets, but is also a virtuoso of bantering, gossipy, monologue. /Lit/ is conspicuously bereft of persons who could pull it off, but I can only hope someone here can recommend the idea to someone elsewhere who could.

[Anonymous No.12942187]

non-linear narrative taking place over 7 (or 14) days. incel becomes best friends with a stacey, eventually driven into a schizophrenic state of mind by intense paranoia created by their friendship, he kills her on day 7

you are welcome for this based idea

[Anonymous No.12943272]

>>12935114
>we caused the Big Bang

[Anonymous No.12943326]

>>12938194
>>12938216
why not both, I once found this book in which the protagonist wakes up in town in the desert (wild west era) and he proceeds to explore it, he doesn't remember anything and soon finds out he was abducted by aliens and that aliens are attacking the village and the rest is in the title

[Anonymous No.12944432]

>>12943326
Funny thing is, I just rewatched that movie yesterday to get some inspiration for a wild west story

[Anonymous No.12944758]

Pigey pigey

[Anonymous No.12944995]

Galahad is somehow mistaken for the devil

[Anonymous No.12945070]

i had two dreams in the last year that i feel have great potential for being fleshed out.
i had a dream about a certain valley
and in this dream i understood weather and time in a new way, and my eyes were capable of zooming and slowing what i see like, sort of like live sports when plays are replayed from different angles.
i was sitting on a hillside in the valley, not really aware of my body but very focused on the plains that extended in front of me. the sun was bright and contrasted with an approaching storm cloud that moved from the plains toward a far treeline. thunder rolled from the storm across miles and reached me. as the clouds approached the forest my vision focused on a creature exiting the storm and tearing to the trees. i was able to zoom and slow the feed, the creature is a primeval lion, her body stretching with speed. golden light suddenly is now flooding the forest, shadows pulling and breaking on her elongated form. the clouds reach the woods and the lion is gone with the golden light fading quickly. i am now in the woods about 100 feet or so and i see a spinning ring of dark shadows dancing, floating in front of me. they spin into a group of shadowy deer that run into the woods out of view.

i few years earlier i had a dream where i had jumped off a cliff to escape a monster bear and been able to fly using a towel on my shoulders like a glider. i soared slowly into the valley which i now dream about and i remember this was the only dream I’ve ever had a narrator in. As I flew, i looked below me and saw houses and structures and i heard a narrator say something descriptive about the people who lived there. i landed in a field near a barn like building and the last thing i remember is walking inside, there werent any people just rusty complicated tools all over the walls.

[Anonymous No.12945208]

>>12937634
P I G E

[Anonymous No.12945707]

>>12935114
A story about the ever-increasing pain and misery a man feels realising that he will never be seen as a sexual parthner from the opposite sex because of his hight. You will be taken on a journey about a man who's fait is sealed as suicidal thoughts and self-loathing slowly chip away at his character, the complete and utter destruction of a person.

[Anonymous No.12945851]

>>12937935
that's literally just crime and punishment you fucking hack

[Gaskun !!LKQ0Koj4uFz No.12945915]

Early 2017...
A fifteen year old Muslim girl named Sara lives in a province of Syria that’s controlled by ISIS. Everyday she toils to care for her bedridden, dementia/cancer laden grandfather. She never knew her father and grandpa tells her that her mother died sometime in 2004 in Iraq shortly after Sara was born. She’s forced to wear a full burqa when she goes out and after she’s almost raped by a some inbred fuckstick, she uses the Silk Road/dark web/black market to purchase a collapsible .308 with a suppressor and 100 rounds of subsonic ammo. This gun here https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=OwBMG_F-5EE
The. Proceeds to wage an “enemy at the gates” style sniper war against the caliphate (after studying YouTube videos on long distance shooting/sniping) while also caring for her delirious grandfather who has fits of PTSD about his time as a sniper fighting against the soviets during the 80’s. His rants also reveal the secret that Sara’s mother was the secret identity of the elusive and deadly “JUBA” sniper
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Juba_(sniper)
that killed numerous US service members during the Iraq war. By being crafty and learning to hide her weaponry under her clothes, Sara plays a deadly game of cat and mouse with ISIS as she hunts for blinds and evades patrols.
Tentatively titled “the sixth pillar”
Writing chapter two as we speak. It’ll probably be done by Halloween. But shit is hectic right now. My dad died yesterday morning and right now Bourbon is the only thing that helps.

[Anonymous No.12946235]

Give me some feedback.

[Anonymous No.12946254]

>>12936618
Is this based on a true story? Is it titled "my diary desu" by any chance?

[Anonymous No.12946265]

I am working on a novel series. I am currently writing a short story about an actor in a culture of avian folk. He is what is called a "Dead Face", basically a clown that portrays a deceased figure meant to be used to satirize the living. He plays Dead Faces of idiots and children, and is he himself believed to be of simple mind. He observes something he should not and is gripped by fear and conspiracy as he must now continue to facade of idiocy.

Essentially pic related but for a clown of a dead person.

[Anonymous No.12946273]

>>12945915
Sorry for your loss. It doesn't sound like a story i'd enjoy but its an interesting premise anyway.

[Anonymous No.12946302]

>>12946235
>lads' camping trip
> In boredom,
> felt bad ---- ax this phrase

I liked the nihilistic vibe of it. It holds the attention. Though, the last paragraph is a bit too much tell not show for my taste.

Idea: perhaps the narrator is back at that place by chance five years later. He sees the bare dirt patch where the duck was buried. You wouldn't even know anything was murdered and buried beneath the soil. Yet he feels guilty for the bare dirt. A girl calls for him in the distance and he leaves. Life goes on.

I dunno, im drunk. have a pepe

[Anonymous No.12946641]

>>12937935
If I were to write an ending for this
>after a year or two, defeated, he returns to his parents, not having forgiven himself, and very likely to fall back to relying on his parents

[Anonymous No.12946651]

>>12935194
for the dialog hurdle I'd suggest watching the quest for fire. they set up distinct, if shallow, characters with minimal communication and no language.

[Anonymous No.12946656]

>a tapir icon
I guess I just gotta click on it and write about someone doing something. Last night, I watched Tucker Carlson going ballistic over some stupid muslim senator saying something about someone doing something. The only thing I could think about was: how dare Tucker do something about someone doing something?

[Anonymous No.12946853]

I'm gay

[Anonymous No.12946862]

>>12946853
me too

[Anonymous No.12947593]

it’s a post apocalyptic novel set after a nuclear war has killed most of the worlds population and left the rest sterile. The protagonist/narrator is bitter about being unable to have children and leave a visible legacy to the world and a lot of his/her (haven’t decided) internal dialogue is about a search for meaning when traditional goals human goals don’t really exist. The protag eventually comes across and artist who has spent the last several years creating life sized sculptures and arranging them to create a still life of his hometown, which has become his life work. At first enraptured, the protagonist eventually becomes bitter at the artist’s ability to create permanence and blinds him before destroying the sculptures

[Anonymous No.12947742]

Anon tries to get a qt 3.14 gf

[Anonymous No.12947752]

>>12946265
>He is what is called a "Dead Face", basically a clown that portrays a deceased figure
Sounds like Zrcadlo from Walpurgisnacht.

[Anonymous No.12947778]

>>12947752
Explain further.

[Anonymous No.12947868]

>>12941413
Yo I opened this expecting to not like it and think it was cringe. I guess I am a bit jaded when it comes to a lot of the writing on this board, especially fantasy. But your writing is clean and very progressive in the sense that it seems to keep moving without hiccups. Very nice anon.

[Anonymous No.12947880]

>>12947778
Zrcadlo is an "actor" who channels dead people from Gustav Meyrink's novel. His name means mirror

[Anonymous No.12947998]

>>12947868
Thanks man, that means a lot to me.

[Anonymous No.12948015]

What are all of your guys creative processes? I just start with an idea of what I think is cool garbage fiction and wing it. Try and mold it into something better along the way. I wrote without a written down outline and maybe that’s a strength or a weakness but I find it easier not to get locked into a preset idea.

[Anonymous No.12948038]

>>12948015
Time is usually my creative process. The metaphors are tired, but they really are seeds, and some aren't worth growing.

If you have the base idea or observation, you can stretch it into plenty of things for a story. Consider how your character's arc fits the base idea, then consider the supporting characters and their relationships, etc. When you think about all that stuff it starts to snowball.

[Anonymous No.12948046]

>>12948038
I hold onto good ideas forever and write down a shitty intro and like 10k words at least so later I can come back and rewrite it when I’ve had time to think about it and get better at writing in general so I understand this

[Anonymous No.12948084]

>>12946641
this ending probably suits his personality

[Anonymous No.12948088]

>>12935114
A group of scientists discover that a cosmic event will end all life on Earth in about one year and this cannot be avoided at all. They realize that telling this to the public will lead to a breakdown of society. So instead they decide to keep it a secret and use their remaining one year for hedonism, spending all their money on luxury holidays.

However, they find that they cannot really relax because they are always worried that another member of the team will rat on them and around halfway of their trip around the world, fucking sluts, doing all kinds of drugs etc. they turn on each other with the fear that someone else will ruin their fun.

[Anonymous No.12950018]

pige

[Anonymous No.12950942]

>>12939911
Good, very good, you fucking bastard.

[Anonymous No.12951018]

>>12948088
Not bad but it would be interesting to see the actual breakdown.

[Anonymous No.12951256]

>>12945915
be honest with yourself senpai you just wanna write about your badass tsundere muslim waifu don't you?

[Anonymous No.12952353]

Pige

[Anonymous No.12953476]

>>12948088
Sounds good, but keep it light hearted, without endless "the world is dying a bloo bloo bloo".
I don't care about the actual breakdown, it's not the interesting part of the story. This is similar to a bunch of thieves committing the perfect crime, and turning on each other afterwards because of the fear of the cops. Find what makes this situation different from the thieves example and focus on that.

[Anonymous No.12953507]

Black man gets called a nigger and goes on to commit murder, but he gets pardoned because the judge felt it was justified.

[Anonymous No.12953513]

>>12945915
Sorry for your loss anon.

>>12947593
Doesn't sound like a novel. It sounds like the first 50-100 pages. In general I'm not a fan of the violent ending, feels kinda forced. Why doesn't he find a different form of art? Why doesn't he create his own dolls? Why resort to violence? It's dramatic, sure, but it isn't any more fulfilling than the protagonist taking comfort in the artist's friendship and deciding to create miniature cities.

[Anonymous No.12953521]

>>12953507
Also have this other story in the works about an interracial couple where the black woman cheats on her boyfriend and the boyfriend, in a fit of rage upon finding out, calls her a nigger and gets ostracized by his friends and family because of it.

I also have this one story already almost finished about a rich black man with a white cleaning lady. The black man calls her a nigger one day and she kills herself out of shame.

[Anonymous No.12953738]

>mixing tenses, didn't pass 10th grade english class
>look at me I can namedrop drugs I'm so cool give me attention
>incel grief
>shallow, disconnected thoughts don't narrate a cohesive story
>no insights to any of the characters, not even the narrarator
>telling not showing, reads like a summary not a story
>cringy diction choice, limited vocabulary, repetitive sentence structure, uninteresting and/or captain obvious commentary
>whiny zoomer thinks people want to read about his masturbation habits and drug addictions
There's potential there but it's buried under incompetence. The story should be a vehicle for what you really wanted to say, and instead, every word you write just buries your point in further mire. Just because your english teacher in 6th grade praised you for that level of shit doesn't make it good. Read more classics and try again. You have to pick your thoughts up out of the mud and give them a shine for them to come through.
It's not the worst thing I've read on /lit/ and you have a point, you just can't competently showcase it.

[Anonymous No.12953744]

>>12953738
for
>>12946235
obviously.

[Anonymous No.12954768]

>>12935114
protagonist: some detective
antagonist: a magician

the magician dude does some flashy crimes but gets caught in a boring way. in court he says he'll plead guilty if the state recognizes he comitted the crime with his mystic magic. this is of course fucking retarded but they cant connect him with the crimes otherwise and they have no clue how he did it.
so the detective backtracks every crime scene for evidence and peice of a story (this is a good chance to sneak in some indicators of motivations for the magic dude) and can at the end retell the complete narrative of the magicians actions, how his tricks work, and why he did it.
ideally i would make it with him ending up out of jail one way or another to keep the mystique feeling at the end, but i cant for the life of me even write a sentence of this story.

[Anonymous No.12954789]

>>12954768
Sounds cool, you could start your story while everyone is already in court and they are recapping the events for the judge

[Anonymous No.12954851]

>>12954789
yeah, that the idea. would start with them asking questions in court about how and qhen he did it and most of his replies would be "with magic your honour owo". so they'd have to get someone to get more thorough with the investigation. namely our protag. id need to contrast them in terms of confidence or a similiar trait and make the chronology and motivations before actually starting writing the individual crimes/scenes tho and im pretty much a brainlet in terms of crime novels

[Anonymous No.12955112]

>>12935114
dust
wind, as the false flagged rewnewable resoirce that it is, got depleted. so dust started settling eveywhere. you gotta use your car if you dont want it to get dusty, planes must ve stored in closed areas and people gotta shake trees and flowers so they can get sun every now and then. just a short story anout a daily life in this reality could be comfy writing for anyone that wants to try.

[Anonymous No.12955120]

pige

[Anonymous No.12955605]

>>12937671
>>12935114
heh
PIGES