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[Anonymous No.1154451]

>criticize my poem

I
write poetry
for the masses
for the drunken
cocaine snorting
presidents
of the future

I
write poetry
for the soldiers

when I
read to the soldiers
they fight there way
through the crowed
to kiss my legs
throw golden coins
and praise my name

I
write poetry
to make the papers
my bottled salvation
'cause its all

I

can affored

[Anonymous No.1154460]

0/10.

[Anonymous No.1156306]

bump

[Anonymous No.1156313]

>Spelling and grammatical issues
>SHIT pacing/rhythm
>cheap, over-done, under-thought concepts
>0/10

Poetry isn't a fucking socio-political pamphlet. If you want to be literal and simple fucking be a journalist.