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Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:44:20 2018 No.10988184 [Reply] [Original]

How to write a sex scene and never say
>I placed my dick on her hymen and rammed it inside.

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:46:21 2018 No.10988200 >>10988184 what's wrong with that?

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:47:38 2018 No.10988206 >>10988184 she placed my dick on her hymen and rammed it inside

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:51:27 2018 No.10988223 If you're not writing smut just imply it

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:51:41 2018 No.10988225 Just get inspiration from your own memories of having sex

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:53:01 2018 No.10988233 >>10988184 read lolita desu

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 16:53:05 2018 No.10988234 >>10988184 Implying it as vague as possible is much better.

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 17:01:10 2018 No.10988275 >>10988225 you killed 4chan

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 17:14:17 2018 No.10988327 >>10988184 she placed her dick on my boypussy and rammed it inside

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 19:31:21 2018 No.10988869 >>10988225 Thanks anon I'll put this advice to good use

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 19:37:16 2018 No.10988900 I don't know. I've written 9001 sex scenes and they all inexplicably have the phrase 'I placed my dick on her hymen and rammed it inside', it is one of the biggest literary problems of our age, anon.

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 19:44:28 2018 No.10988930 >I tore down her last defense, like the Romans did at Salamis against Cyrus.

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 19:46:57 2018 No.10988946 >>10988184 Same problem different sentence anon I cannot for the life or me stop writing this >i put my pee pee in hir vaginer and she smile and the BRAAAAAPPPPPP

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 19:50:15 2018 No.10988965 >>10988184 Just copy a sex scene from a movie or your favorite BLACKED scene

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 23:25:42 2018 No.10989897 >>10988184 Then, we had sex. (End of chapter.)

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 23:26:38 2018 No.10989901 >>10988225 get a load of this edgelord.

>>	Anonymous Wed Apr 11 23:28:00 2018 No.10989903 >>10988930 Too obscure, our readers won't get the reference. Revise it.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 02:46:05 2018 No.10990600 >>10988184 Metaphors galore or write around it without describing anything. Graphic sex in text is not great to read most of the time, but implied sex is cherished by those who like a romantic subplot

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 02:51:42 2018 No.10990616 >>10988930 are you retarded? cyrus killed all the romans at salamis with his war elephants

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 02:52:39 2018 No.10990619 >>10988184 i gotchu senpai >i fucked her in the pussy

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 05:53:01 2018 No.10990972 >>10988206 She placed her dick on my hymen and rammed it inside

>>	The Nomad !N8Yn.I/WbM Thu Apr 12 06:01:55 2018 No.10990988 >>10988184 “SUGOI! MY DICK FEELS LIKE IT’S MELTING!” Done.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 06:08:19 2018 No.10990995 >>10988225 Cruel

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 06:09:15 2018 No.10990999 >>10988184 I kicked the door in with a battering ram evoked by pure, unadulterated, sexual anger. The screams from her windpipes shuttered her temple. The waterworks began as the cherries began exploding around inside the sanctum.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 07:04:06 2018 No.10991095 >>10988184 Just don’t write sex scenes, just say >then they went to bed and fucked until the morning sun cast low shadows on their entwined figures

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 07:35:29 2018 No.10991158 >>10991095 Yeah, I think I'll do something similar. The sex isn't important but the feelings he has during it so I'll just make him think about it afterwards instead of making my protagonist autistically think about life during sex.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:03:17 2018 No.10991209 >>10988184 >You placed your dick again her winking marecunt and rammed it inside.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:04:38 2018 No.10991214 >>10990616 oh look its cyrusbot again spreading fake history.

Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:17:18 2018 No.10991242
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>>10988184
I always start with a description that suggests that two characters are about to fuck, and then I go on to describe the room around them, or something sensory. Then I write the finishing actions in a non-medical way (usually the guy cums quick). I try to avoid the following words: ass, cum, dick, hot, orgasm, panting, penis pussy, sweaty, thrusting, tits, vagina, etc. That way I can avoid being crude or falling into cliches.

>She maneuvered her way behind him, taking him in her left hand. Quite the grip, he said. She chuckled, not sure how to take that comment, always on the defensive. The trees provided ample cover from onlookers and, save for the wind and the mosquitos taking shade, there was silence. They were alone, with no evidence any human had ever found their mid-summer retreat. She worked her free hand up under his shirt, feeling his abdomen, finding her way toward his chest. He jerked forward, and then relaxed. It was over.

The grip thing is because the woman is a trap. He knows, don't worry, and you would have too if you didn't skip to the naughty bits. Lewd.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:27:15 2018 No.10991264 >>10991158 2666 by Robert Bolano deals with sex quite well. At least the first 140ish pages have a lot of it. He does suck the soul out of it a bit, but then again, the sex they have is soulless so perhaps thats why,

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:29:34 2018 No.10991271 >>10988225 y-yeah good idea....

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:30:42 2018 No.10991274 >>10988930 >The dick, likeDemetrius Poliorcetes at Rhodes, then lay siege to her hymen.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:33:23 2018 No.10991280 File: 721 KB, 728x682, 1519313117857.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>10991242 >Quite the grip, he said.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:34:15 2018 No.10991282 >>10991209 against* Sorry, you're welcome to steal this of course.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:36:55 2018 No.10991296 File: 263 KB, 500x727, 1523242975370.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>10991280 I'll publish it one day.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:41:42 2018 No.10991315 File: 20 KB, 255x240, 1519305107337.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>10988184 take inspiration from Japanese literature

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:43:22 2018 No.10991320 File: 2.43 MB, 1280x1879, 1519310199598.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>10991315

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:45:31 2018 No.10991334 >>10991296 Don't lose hope, anon! 50 Shades of Grey started as a fanfic of Twilight.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:49:50 2018 No.10991347 >>10991242 This just sounds like he came after one thrust.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:50:26 2018 No.10991350 >>10991315 that cant be real.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:51:57 2018 No.10991356 >>10991320 Nice. Sauce?

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:52:38 2018 No.10991358 >>10988225 >

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 08:58:00 2018 No.10991375 >>10991350 It's a translation so take it as you will

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 09:10:20 2018 No.10991409 On her hymen I placed my dick and rammed it inside.

Anonymous Thu Apr 12 09:10:22 2018 No.10991410
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>>10991347
I was writing that from memory and condensing a longer scene just to use an example. In the real thing there wasn't the corny 'quite the grip' line either. I had spent more time describing temperature, smell, etc. - just being more indulgent to extend the scene. But really, some guys are inadequate and I enjoy depictions of men who cannot perform. At least I'm trying to help OP.

Eventually I'd like to be able to do in words what Jim Steranko can do in images (pic related).

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 09:16:20 2018 No.10991432 My dick was diamonds. she said "Simon, won't you climb in, pop my hymen?"

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 09:30:58 2018 No.10991490 I put my thingie deep inside her.

Anonymous Thu Apr 12 09:45:15 2018 No.10991535

"Yes, now I can remember that night when I fucked you for so long backwards. It was the dirtiest fucking I ever gave you, darling. My prick was stuck up in you for hours, fucking in and out under your upturned rump. I felt your fat sweaty buttocks under my belly and saw your flushed face and mad eyes. At every fuck I gave you your shameless tongue come bursting out through your lips and if I gave you a bigger stronger fuck than usual fat dirty farts came spluttering out of your backside. You had an arse full of farts that night, darling, and I fucked them out of you, big fat fellows, long windy ones, quick little merry cracks and a lot of tiny little naughty farties ending in a long gush from your hole. It is wonderful to fuck a farting woman when every fuck drives one out of her. I think I would know Nora’s fart anywhere. I think I could pick hers out in a roomful of farting women. It is a rather girlish noise not like the wet windy fart which I imagine fat wives have. It is sudden and dry and dirty like what a bold girl would let off in fun in a school dormitory at night. I hope Nora will let off no end of her farts in my face so that I may know their smell also."

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 11:22:56 2018 No.10991920 >>10990999 Literatura

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 11:27:29 2018 No.10991928 >>10991242 >He jerked forward, and then relaxed. It was over. holy fuck I'm dying

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 11:35:42 2018 No.10991969 >>10991242 You're joking right?

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 11:41:21 2018 No.10991989 >>10991969 Yeah, I like a good giggle. That was a poor example, to be fair, but forgive me for having just woke up when I threw it together.

Anonymous Thu Apr 12 11:47:41 2018 No.10992005

>"Connie had a wry, compact intelligence, a firm little clitoris of discernment and sensitivity."

>“What had been his diffusely warm world of domestic refuge had collapsed, overnight, into the hot, hungry microcosm of Patty’s cunt. Which he still couldn’t believe he had such cruelly fleeting access to.”

>“How the honey flowed from her. He dipped his finger in it lingeringly, then his sex, then he moved her so that she lay on him, her legs thrown over his legs, and as he took her, he could see himself entering into her and she could see him too.”

>"I gave her to hold in my awkward fist the sceptre of my passion.”

Sex is hard to write.

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 12:39:20 2018 No.10992210 >>10988184 Read Updike if you want to write about sex

>>	Anonymous Thu Apr 12 12:41:21 2018 No.10992218 BULBOUS SALUTATION

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