/lit/ - Literature

[OCAuthor !GpPUkxyexg No.1062088]

Hey, I am going to be a pretty famous author someday. I have been writing for years, and have really come along as of late. This is a sample of my latest writing and just wanted to know what you guys thought about it. Maybe you can learn something from it. I don't know, but I am here for questions if you have any. Thanks

[Anonymous No.1062094]

>>1062088
>>1062088

Piece of fucking shit

[Anonymous No.1062096]

>>1062088

so is the boy and the killer the same person

i dont get it lol

[OCAuthor !GpPUkxyexg No.1062100]

>>1062096
You don't "get" it because you are an obvious product of public schools, never read anything decent in your life, and generally, are slow.

[Anonymous No.1062102]

>There was a dark stain on the carpet in the living room "Maybe mommy spilled some of her happiness" this was my first thought when I saw that stain, and in later years I came to learn that happiness was mommy's term for wine.

Holy shit this stuff is awful.

[None !UyhAEqbnp. No.1062104]

Eh, you just wrote one of the most cliche psychological thriller stories on earth. Not terrible writing in itself, but the whole "It was the protagonist all along is really over-used.

Additionally, I'd like to point out that my reality-detector dropped to an all time low after reading that a boy under 12 would be able to kill a father with a bitcher knife. Lol, you best be joking. Nobody does that without a scratch. Butcher knife is also cliche, for the record

Bottom line I would recommend is that you try being more original.

[OCAuthor !GpPUkxyexg No.1062105]

>>1062102
Troll. Not a very good one I might add.

[OCAuthor !GpPUkxyexg No.1062108]

>>1062104
Are you in the 3rd grade or something? I wrote this for adults, so bugger off.

[None !UyhAEqbnp. No.1062110]

>>1062108
Sorry philosopher-chan, I'd thought they'd banned you.