/lit/ - Literature

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>>9762900
Stop using passive voice. Stop using big words until you can actually write sentences that read well.

Play less Roblox and read some fucking books. Start with the sticky.

>>9762900
There are so many things wrong with that first sentence that I don't even know where to begin. No, you are not a good writer. You know big words, but you have no idea how to use them. And you have no idea how to phrase and structure a sentence that doesn't make me want to gouge my eyes out when I read it. The main problem with your writing, like every new writer, is that you put all your effort into sounding intelligent rather than attempting to write well. Start off with simple sentences that flow well and tell the reader everything they need to no, rather than vomiting out clunky phrases, grammatically incorrect sentences that have absolutely zero flow, and unnecessarily complicated images. It's also exceptionally purple: you use a lot of words in an effort to look smart, but actually say very little.

Stop writing and go read a bunch of classics. Writing practice is not what you need right now. You really need to understand the fundamentals of writing. I genuinely feel bad for whatever discord you posted that garbage in.

>>9762958
yeah but the people in the discord don't read often so they thought it was good.

also please remember that i didn't spend much time on this, as in I did not revise it

>>9762969
Don't get so butthurt by criticism, also ignore his advice about stopping writing. Keep both reading and writing and you'll improve.

>>9762943
literally nothing wrong with passive voice

>>9762900
>chutzpah of unparalleled directions

lmao

>>9762983
yeah dude i went pretentious because i was writing a fanfic about my roblox clans

>>9762900
I stopped after three sentences. just because you know big words doesn't mean you have to use them. I know that people on /lit/ don't really like SK but I do and I like the tips in pic related

>>9762987
I think you should read Bukowski to see how, to paraphrase Hemingway, big emotions don't come from big words.

Then you should read Nabokov to see how to use big words in an artful way.

I would also get into the habit of going to the OED to look up words you don't know (what does "chutzpah" really mean, how is it used, what's its origin, etc.)

I wrote a really cringy essay for my application to the University of Chicago where I did exactly this. I'll share it if I can find it.

>>9763017
sorry, "this" referring to using big words without knowing how to properly wield them

>>9762900
>lol ill post someone's cringey comment to RP as them! epin!

frig off

>>9763017
>>9763009

thanks dudes.
reading war and peace right now