/lit/ - Literature

>>6994611
time comes and goes
all the while
i still think of you

Like my mum but not my mum but sexy... Not saying my mum is sexy hahahaha but yeah I want someone close :D

She goes barefoot in the pasture in the padded mud and unkempt grass, fistfuls of barley meal swinging loose at her sides. Her white sun dress is dusted tan and ashgray at the hem. She is beautiful. The horse hears brush snapping at her slender weight and raises his head, nodding and snorting soft. He canters excited to meet her through the motes of ragweed all alight in the golden sun. They meet in the middle and he nods again as if to greet her and her hands find his cold wet muzzle. She slide her hands slowly up to his cheek and rolls the hot loose flesh gentle in her hands. But he is too excited. His body ripples and he shuffles from side to side, shaking dust loose into the space between them.
Woah boy, she says stepping back. She has a child’s voice.
The horse is already erect.

big hips/ass
itty bitty waist
flat chest
mute

>>6994611
I only need one word:
>Loyal

If any anon says otherwise, they haven't lived or experienced women long enough.

The girl of my dreams most probably wouldn't be the girl of my dreams. She's probably that girl I barely notice, as I pass her through a doorway.

Amorphous and ever changing. The only constant is she never ends up being the woman I am with.

>>6994618
are you German?

"Her legs move spastically like a cat being drowned in a tub of water. Her arms shiver and shake with every sentence she omits. Her jaw appears to disconnect when the smallest morsel of food enters it. I stare at her with a combination of lust and disgust and I cannot reconcile the difference."

Or more? Don't mind if I do!

So, let's start off. I like dicks. Like wow, you might be surprised when I tell you this in person, but cocks are just about the most amazing thing in the world. Freud would definitely have something to say about me, let me tell you. But I also like tits. Big tits. We're talking F-cup or more, and if it's more, I don't mind a little sag, but only a few inches' worth please. So you might be asking yourself, how can a girl have a dick? Well, my friend, this is about the girl of your dreams, and that girl, indeed, can never be, not in one year or a thousand. For although the desires of men are unceasing, the rudiments to fulfill them are but a score and waning, and once waned we must spend ourselves in our science, in our literature, in our philosophies so that we gain even just one more piece of stardust to achieve that thing we claim as a dream. And then, when we have our millions and billions of stardust specks, will we be satisfied in our desires? Could we stop then even if we knew when to do so? That is the terror of our future and our now, to have so much and have no idea how we are losing until it is lost.

>>6994634
so you're a cuck?

>>6994657
No he has commitment issues

>>6994611
As we walked down the Rue de la Montagne my mind drifted as a boat along its long shores. If I closed my eyes I could imagined spending every day like this, all the way to eternity
"What are you dreaming of, my love?"
"Ah just the beauty of it. It's incredible you know, being here with you
I can't really explain it... it's like a movement deep in my chest..
I almost feel like I could just run and run forever.."

She just laughed and looked out at the waves rolling in with the warm tide
"It's my body, isn't it?"
And I couldn't deny that she was a good looking girl, her slender frame hung just right, as if by a sculptor from the old days, before the terrible revolutions
"No.. it's just, well.."
"Oh come on, out with it"
"I think I'm in love with you"
She looked toward me with those big hazel eyes as they slowly filled with tears
"I- I think I love you too"
"But you don't exist"
"Wha-"
"I'm sorry, but I need to charge my Oculus rift. See you tomorrow, love"

Critique pls

>>6994634
he said the girl of your dreams not how do you watch porn

>>6994705
kek

>>6994705

>>6994624
are you that fat nova scotian guy from youtube?

>>6994623
you've described my actual partner. add "has some get-up-and-go" and i'd be happy.

brings out the best in me

>>6994624
>Say mah name
>Here, buy your mother a house

my gf

>>6994611
A girl who could make my insecurities vanish, make me more sociable and tolerating, less stubborn and proud and scared of everything.
Unfortunately, I think "girl of my dreams" describes it well, because meeting such a girl seems to be a paradoxical situation.
Regrettably, that's on me, not her.

She real
But I dream
Bout her when
She ain't here
Ayyyyy

>>6994784
Is she really mute?

>>6994798
*wheezy cough*

Aliya Mustifina

The first one that will have me.

>>6994921
Kind of a mute point tbh

>>6994705
please guys

help me work on my dialogue and descriptors

>>6995147
Don't make your descriptions so blunt, and break up your dialogue with something in the scene you're constructing. Like:

>"What are you dreaming of my love?" She tore her gaze away from the receding shop windows, a bemused tinge in that resting tappestry

>>6995171
thanks anon, I'll work on that

>>6995174
You're very welcome, hope you have fun!

>>6994618
Me Freud will see you now.

Hipparchia.

Her uneasiness with questions and contests of love wasn't entertaining in the least, it was necessary. I needed her to shake the air between us to know how much distance there really was. Neither of us wanted to be part of each other's game, but she made this pointless (like it were a fucking game), and so I decided to play.

Lolita, light of my life, fire of my loins. My sin, my soul. Lo-lee-ta: the tip of the tongue taking a trip of three steps down the palate to tap, at three, on the teeth. Lo. Lee. Ta. She was Lo, plain Lo, in the morning, standing four feet ten in one sock. She was Lola in slacks. She was Dolly at school. She was Dolores on the dotted line. But in my arms she was always Lolita. Did she have a precursor? She did, indeed she did. In point of fact, there might have been no Lolita at all had I not loved, one summer, an initial girl-child. In a princedom by the sea. Oh when? About as many years before Lolita was born as my age was that summer. You can always count on a murderer for a fancy prose style. Ladies and gentlemen of the jury, exhibit number one is what the seraphs, the misinformed, simple, noble-winged seraphs, envied. Look at this tangle of thorns.

Standing before me barefoot in the grass, her hair glowing in the sun, she smiled and took my hand in hers and said, "Look at me, I'm the captain now." Then she dragged me down the hill.

Standing barefoot before me, she smiled, took my hand, and said, "Look at me, I am the captain now." Then she dragged me down the hill.

Attractive, intelligent, and not feminist

Intelligent, nihilistic, and with a wicked sense of humour

Myself with titties and a vagina

>>6995171
>She tore her gaze away from the receding shop windows, a bemused tinge in that resting tappestry
IMHO that's significantly worse than anything in the post you're critiquing. It's entirely superluous, breaks the flow of the dialogue (after the first line, no less) and I can't even work out what the second part is supposed to mean. Also that's not how you spell 'tapestry'.

If you were rusing then go right ahead.

>>6994798
You loyal, I appreciate that.

>>6995437
>superluous
I brought this on myself.

Challenging

>>6995437
I was the original writer
Yeah I mean the sentence wasn't good but he made a good point about choosing bettor descriptors, I think the whole thing was a bit wooden in that regard
the themes were mismatched too what with the river which I should have made into a conceit (also of course this river in paris doesn't have tides and waves)
I wanted to say she was chunky too but couldn't find a fitting word (obviously well-endowed wasn't going to fit)
also of course there's the idea that more descriptors and names would probably help with creating the scene

just rambling at this point

Miss Alice

>>6994624
>Loyal

that's not how you spell Loli

>>6995497
Kiwis get out

>>6995497
She seems mentally retarded

>>6995551
Ive never seen her say or write anything
Why does everybody say this?
Who cares anyway, she has the best body ever

>>6995563
Look at her talk in some places, she seems obnoxious and retarded

True though, but tbh most slim feminine figured girls can have a body like that, her tits aren't real. The only thing she has a big advantage in is the ass.

>>6994627

This.

Pretty, smart, honest and fair. Someone that I like and that loves me back.

>>6994611
As I'm writing this I'm shaking. My convulsions aren't born out of any particular lack of emotional connection to the world, or any particular fear or aversion to females, but rather because I already know the 'girl of my dreams.' I am her close friend, and it scares me. I surround myself in rhetoric that asserts that 99% of women are boring and essentially emotionally redundant for everything other than sex if you have close friends, and I observe this phenomenon daily in my own experiences of the world.

The fundamental 'thing' about my oneitis is that she is just not boring. She's not particularly attractive, falling into the ever-shrinking cross-section of the female population that are both attractive enough to not be physically offputting and 'normal' looking enough that they have to find their own way. The important thing is that she's the only woman I've ever met that actually lives for herself. A useful point of reference would be that if all women were like her, then most of the fundamental problems with feminism would go away.

I could bore you all with detailed ramblings about all the traits I've grown to obsess over and love, but it wouldn't really be worth it. She doesn't wear makeup, doesn't exercise, is covered in pimples, but just brings me joy. She's not a boring person. That one increasingly rare trait is enough to make a 'dream girl.'

Unrelated, but David Tibet is a fucking amazing lyricist.

>>6994705
I like it, except

>I almost feel like I could just run and run forever.."
don't understand the meaning

intelligent, argumentative, not hideous.

>>6995734
well it's a feeling I've felt when you really like someone - it's almost like love, but not quite, when you're with them. Like a tightness in your chest and you just feel full of energy and electricity when you're together.
I originally wrote something else (don't recall exactly what) and I realize the running thing was poorly worded but that's what I was going for anyways

My dream girl don't exist
And at the age of five she slit her wrist
She didn't know that I'd be hanging around
So one day she took a stroll to town
And walked in front of a greyhound bound
For New York Central State

And the weight is waiting off
And the weight is waiting off
Feel the world so real and strong
She goes, and now she knows
She'll never be afraid

>>6995734
>>6995759
Interestingly, when I'm running and I think of oneitis, I push myself MUCH more than I do at other times. Maybe worth keeping dude.

>>6995759
I see. As for me, running is more associated with either escaping a negative situation or trying to go to a (better) place. That's why I was confused. I think jumping or dancing would fit better

>>6995783
Nah, if you're going to replace it replace it with flying.

>>6994617
That's deep, bro. I like it.

>>6994611
A real-life impossibility, that which cannot be, a chimera that could only be concocted in the most delirious late-night trances.

>>6994611
nah

>>6994611
Martina Borjesson

>>6994611
Can you assist me with a cum drum conundrum? OP's pic related

Imaginary

She's intelligent, interestingly beautiful, perceptive, funny She's in another country now, we left on bad terms. She's manipulative and intimidatingly intelligent with noticing eyes and implacable motives. I'm still somewhat in shambles.

She, my equal, and nothing more. She, flawed as I am, and no less. We, that life be less lonely and that our joys do not go unnoticed.

>>6995429
>intelligent, not feminist

your criteria contradicts itself partner

>>6997244
This is the biggest shill post of the century. Modern feminism is the epitome of obliviousness/ignorance

I'm waiting for my blonde Norweigan waifu who listens to death metal and hates nigs too like any self respecting intelligent human

>>6997252
posting pol opinions over and over "ironically" isnt funny

>>6997261
you can ignore the /pol/ trollpost half of my posts if you want, but the first half is true. Modern feminism is consisted of the stupidest, most brainless saps imaginable. Especially since women have had equal rights in America since 1920 or something

Its a group of people oppressing themselves on purpose because they want special treatment

>>6997261
and btw, nothing is ever funny to a feminist because the only thing that is funny is either nigger humor, or off jokes about how many times theyve gotten banged in their dirty loose cunts

>>6997279
>Its a group of people oppressing themselves on purpose because they want special treatment
I find this statement funny given your extremely obvious martyr complex

>>6997310
No, I'm being serious. This is their idea: "I'm a woman and I have a cunt so I can go off and bang as many dudes as I possibly can and if you call me a dirty whore slut youre oppressing me, why don't you treat me like Tyrone and just fuck my cunt nonstop without worrying about like STDs?"

>>6994623
You want a retarded loli with a fat ass?

Pierced tits
Pierced pussy
Loves me
Loves fucking
Finds me funny

>>6994611
nine years old and never ages

woman's body with a man's mind

>>6994647
I kinda feel bad, you recieving no attention for this post, so I'll just leave this here.

>>6997338

>>6995147
you should describe more stuff with descriptors! trust me.

>>6997310
lol don't take the bait, m8. idiots will drag you down to their level and beat you with experience

The paradox is that she needs to have impeccable taste but she also needs to be attracted to the piece of shit that is me.

>>6997469
that is why you must improve yourself for the girl

>>6997252
Good luck with that. I come from Norway and she doesn't exist.

>>6997310
>>6997325
>>6997244
The notion that any intelligent woman is a feminist is the epitome of HIV+ thinking.

First of all, intelligence unlike gained knowledge is hereditary, hence any woman who simply is not exposed to feminism but is intelligent will not be one. By this simple criteria your statement is false.

Second, feminism is against anything that femininity represents, and most women nowadays ascribe to feminist thinking and lifestyle (even though many are afraid of calling themselves such). To see beyond this veil of ideological deceit is something that a truly intelligent woman can do. Feminism is simply applying masculinity to females.

Egalitarianism itself is naive and gullible, but feminism goes above and beyond. You live in a mental cesspool of HIV+ liquids and feces, you are the ideological poison of humanity.

And to AZAZAZA, there are beautiful women out there who value traditionalism, and although it might be hard to stumble upon one and then appear to her as worthy, they're not that few. And honestly, some don't even have to be that intelligent to see the sort of poison feminism is.

As she walked down the road, she looked at me.
She calmfully smiles.
A car hits her

>>6997818
>calmfully

Her hair, crow's feather
Her eyes, fruit of the forest

>>6997833
shut up, english is not my first language

>>6997718
ur a faget

>>6997839
cute

>>6995437
Sorry I was very tired last night so I didn't think through a proper piece. I usually spend a lot of time on something.

>>6997718
From my experience, most women only claim to be feminists because that is what the collective shouts as the thing they have to say they are. When actually talking to them about feminist issues, most women don't agree with the core values of 3rd wave feminism if you describe them without the 'feminist' context, and really only say that they are to fit in (And to avoid the negative repercussions from being labelled 'anti-feminist').

>>6997359
just date a tranny bro

Like Spurdo but hot

J.R.M.

>>6997882
Combined those with the countless ones that deep inside would want to settle down with their ideal mate more than anything in the world, but ideological poison creates permanent inner conflict and denial within them.

It's actually terrifying, it's like sexual repression of a person raised under strict fundamentalism but multiplied by a thousand.

slut drinking my cum
while drunk on rum
in desert sun

>>6997882
What do you think thrid wave feminist core values are?
I think most women who would claim to be feminists now would agree non-strait, non-white, and trans women are important; there is no excuse/exculpatory circumstance for rape; and reproductive rights for women are nearly absolute.

>>6997956
That's how it has always been - the one thing most destructive to women is other women. Expect one upon a time it was only being catty and spreading rumors. Now it is a systematic, active, and constantly vigilant system to ensure ideological adherence and constant unhappiness.

It would be a good question to ask the hardcore of the 3rd wave, whether or not they are actually happy. Not counting a smug sense of superiority when they out someone as 'anti-feminist'-happy, but 'Embracing their mate after a long day, not thinking of anything, but knowing they are completely safe and loved utterly' - happy.

>>6997999
once* upon...

>>6997244
>criteria
>singular

>>6997999
> 'Embracing their mate after a long day, not thinking of anything, but knowing they are completely safe and loved utter'
Who has ever been like this? People have always been plagued with doubts and dissatisfaction with long term partners. Infidelity, dissatisfaction, and malaise didn't magically come into existence with modern feminism.

>>6998027
A Lusty Readheaded Dwarf with alchoholic Leanings that suffers from melancholy once in a while..

>>6998027
Destructive relationships are so much more prevalent, people are misguided and have no idea what to believe because their interests conflict with their ideology.

The amount of feminists who fetishize rape is comical

>>6994611
literally useless beyond being a receptacle for my semen

>>6994705
nice

>>6998063
>Destructive relationships are so much more prevalent
[citation needed]

>people are misguided and have no idea what to believe because their interests conflict with their ideology.
Not a new phenomenon

>>6997252
Death metal is derived from black rock music fam

>>6998126
/r/relationships

Jaunty and with a quiet grace, a whispered song. Alive as I am not, an old soul too wise to fear freedom and fun.

>>6998144
>girl of your dreams

>>6998139
>/r/4chan

>>6994617

Just because the mind is in the habit of revisiting certain thoughts does not mean they are meaningful, although we tend to make them out so.

vagina open
mouth closed

>>6998299
the mouth arguably feels better though

the sight of her face with her mouth wide open around your cock is a nice thing

>>6998306
>putting your dick in a hole full of teeth that's made for biting
Jesus Christ, how horrifying!

I think I may literally have a phobia about blowjobs, tbh.

Her hair hung in dense brown curls that bobbed gently as she approached. When she recognized me, she smiled. The soft curvature of her lips transmitted a surge of energy into me, which rose through my restless offal and mastered my lips into a returned grin. She was near me now. Through the darkness in her eyes and in the slight separation of her teeth I could see, I felt, into the depths of her very essence, into a hidden chamber flooded with light and warmth and a beatitude that seemed almost attainable, as if suspended from an eternal thread just slightly beyond my reach. If I jumped I could reach it, I thought. But the thread, as delicate and incorrigible as she was, could not withstand the weight of my grasp. And so I could only tread delicately, hoping that the thread would somehow extend its light into the center of my eternally expectant palm. We embraced and I felt the sun on my neck. It was terribly hot.

>>6994611
A girl who fancies herself to be a hedonist but has a profoundly conservative moral frame of reference, so that she ends up being fairly vanilla by modern sexual standards but conducts herself with that unique sense of transgressive delight that comes from knowingly indulging in sin.

>>6998778
Sounds like my last girlfriend. A nice girl

>>6998504
>into the depths of her very essence, into a hidden chamber flooded with light and warmth and a beatitude that seemed almost attainable, as if suspended from an eternal thread just slightly beyond my reach.
Take me Anon. Just take me any way you want.

I look at her giant plump titties staring at me naked, "Anon-sama please just one more time please just fuck me one more time"

I laugh at her mortal foolishness as i begin to rub her delicate flower. I laugh agian but now to my horror she has transformed into a giant balloon

>>6998879
this made me laugh so hard

She was at her most beautiful when I couldn't see anything but the top of her head. As she pulled away, I remembered how much I hated her.

I am dating my dream girl. The childhood friend, loves me, Love my hobbies, Ride and die loyalty, beauty.

However, once your fantasies leave...you catch up to yourself, you find ways to destroy what you have, shes too pleb, there's hotter chicks, your too ugly, your too poor, etc.

You'll do everything to avoid the fact your broken and it scary to change, its scary to laugh at stupid things, it scary to really believe they really want to be around you because they like you, it scary to understand people actually can love you.

V.

Tangled silky black hair that tumbles down to her flat chest, a sharp downturned foxish countenance with little sparkling green eyes that curiously look up at me, sides that curve toward her navel under her tight long-sleeve top, a gait that almost bounces on the balls of her feet.

>>6999487

who are these peen queens?

>>6999523
want

The chase never seems to cease. Time and time again I catch a fleeting glance out of the corner of my eye, but when I turn to greet your glowing eyes you're always gone again. Nothing but a fading smile lost in silver screen skies.

>>6995358

you're nothing special,
you don't have much to offer,
you're not that fun to be around,
yet there's something about you

>>6994623
top top lel m8

>>6997882
One of the most outspoken "feminists" in my senior class was adamant that anal sex was disgusting and that she'd never have sex with a bi guy, or even a guy who'd only had anal sex with a female partner.