/lit/ - Literature

"Here's the last piece of my country you haven't stomped on yet"

>>6448721


Ow.

>>6448721

>30_seconds_before_rpg_attack.jpg

>>6448706

**Soldier

>>6448706
"Hello."

A blue bhurka'd girl waved, a spot of exultant color against the sand and clay. She held a branch, little more than a weed, but it was beautiful and had white flowers. Her wave dropped and she looked at him with the hazel and green and azure in her eyes.

"Come close, you're fine."

She refused to move and stared, clutching the branch in her hand, crushing one of the flowers underneath her impossibly small fingers.

"It's alright, you're fine."

--

"Oh God."

The rifle dropped. The soldier with his subdued greens and greys sprinted out of the formation to the chagrin of his friend and flew towards the blackened huts. A single spot of brown and red and brilliant blue sat against a wall. Her beautiful dress had been shredded, her small, soft face now unrecognizable. The top of her head was missing. She did not have her eyes anymore.

The soldier had fallen against the wall and tried, with shaking arms, to pick her up. She was limp and her blood streaked his uniform with reds and browns. He carried her to the outskirts of the ruined village and buried her using his helmet as a shovel to carry the loose and disturbed earth.

"No place for a child here."

The soldier was little more than a sobbing boy when he pulled the branch from his pocket, now missing its flowers and broken from the hustle of combat, and dropped it on the impossibly small mound.

>>6448857
Don't write.

>>6448857

Exercise #3 was a mistake - OP.

>>6448857
>burqa
>"burkha'd"

Stopped immediately. Please at least proof-read.

>>6448706
>>>/diy/

>>6448866
>>6448878
These sorts of critiques are my favorite. they're baseless and lazy, just a direct attack on the writer.
>>6448882
Now this, I can get behind. Thanks friendo, I'll do that next time.

Boy with gun, sat down
Girl with flowers, hand outstretched
Spoiler: then they fuck

>>6448706
A girl gives flowers
to the foreigner--
his fingers always
graze his gun.

>>6448896
No problem, anon. To be clearer, not only is burqa misspelled but the clothing itself also isn't a burqa.
http://women-of-islam.wikia.com/wiki/Islamic_Headwear

>>6448919
The more you know. Reading now.

>>6448909
Underrated post.

>>6449228

I liked it too

"What's that?" patience wearing thin. "Possible target" shoulder height to his com. "Yeah mother fucker give it here." BLAM BLAM BLAM "She pulled a gun on me!"

>>6448909
This one's really great

And in one gesture, she resonated the thoughts of the ideal world.

Second image

Haiku it is.

A tiny, shy girl
Cautiously makes a new friend;
"See? We're not all bad."

>>6448706
>The great thing about the army isn't killing ragheads, it's showing everyone in the village that I did it

>>6451649
never even noticed

>>6448909

>his fingers never
>leave his gun.