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pls help

>>5288549
durka durka durka

allahu akbar

Implied countdown is a lot better.
Compare to "The hands raced towards zero" "Tick, tock, tick, tock."
Onomatopoeia should just go out the window in the situation.

>>5288549
"Clickity click clock tick tock splock," said the clock.

>>5288549
A ticking comes across the sky....

>>5288560

Perched upon the ham hock,
Sayeth I to the clock:
"Clock, please stop
the ticking emitting
for your guts and that
causes mine too
to be as wound and bedeviled by
the designs of better men"

the poem is called gay clock

>>5288571
Do it, OP

Postmodern masterpiece

"Tick-tack" the bomb whispered
"I'm sorry?"
"Tick-tack"
"Oh, no thank you"
"Tick-tack"
The man breathed into a cupped hand and sniffed.
"Tick-tack"
"If you insist. Thank you"
"You're welcome"

"Yeah, and you don't stop cus I'm just like a clock when I tick and I tock."

They don't use mechanically driven devices any more, OP.

It's all soundless electronics, or a chemical fuse (usually as a delayed backup).

Take a look at some Clancy thing. The Sum of All Fears might have a bit of what you are going for, albeit the description is of the bomb going off.

For the suspense part, it shows the how the bomb is transported into place, and what the characters do to get it there. What the characters do and how they do it before it goes boom may be the idea you're looking for, rather than just 'tic-tic-tic-ping-wizzz'.

>>5288562

Funny as hell.

And ... yet ...

>>5288586

"The more the timebomb ticked, the more it tocked, but the more it tocked, the more it ticked"

>>5288556

How is it "implied" countdown when you literally say "the hands raced towards zero"?

>>5289119
It is more implicit than "5, 4, 3, 2, 1, 0" which would be an explicit *count-down*. "Tick tack tick tack" is also pretty explicit since it represents each step in a count down. It's like you didn't take time to think about it.

>>5289107
Sunset found him deactivating the bomb...

>>5288587
This, anything with a clock of anytype is something for Wiley Coyote. Cell phone or pressure plates/trip wires, or a chemical device if you absolutely must have a "time bomb".

If you have to ask, don't bother

>>5288585
lol

...TICK...TICK...TICK...

>>5288549
"tckh, tckh, tckh, tckh, tckh..."

>>5288549
Modern bombs don't tick.

>>5288555

Amateurs.

All of you.

Quack quack quack quack quack quack quack quack quack quack quack

>Is the bomb quacking down to death
>or am I, quacking myself, to sanity?

1, 2, 3, 4, 5

>autism

"Tick-tack"

Are you a fucking moron? It's tick tock

>>5288585
That's good.

>>5288549
Read Petersburg by Beley, if you want to know how to really go with the idea.

Onomatopoeia is for comic books.