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Tell me what you think?

Dust haiku

A vessel for souls.
Dust connects the universe.
Energy's kingdom.

>> No.4082874

Dark Masters haiku

Employees of war.
The children of the Abyss.
Humans are there toys.

>> No.4082873

Very good, you're a very special boy!

How's your milk? Too much sugar?

>> No.4082875

>>4082874
>there

7/10 I actually replied

>> No.4082876

Desolate haiku

Lost in a wasteland.
Skeletons all around me.
A ghost of a ghost.

>> No.4082882

Can't sleep haiku

Insomniac man.
Sleep is what he searches for.
Enemy of time.

>> No.4082884

>>4082870
No season. No turn.
Springs sun is an occulum
Of your lukewarmth

>> No.4082886

Mario Haiku

Knight of the mushroom.
A plumber in over-alls.
Sworn to monarchy.

>> No.4082890

Pokemon Haiku

Got to catch them all.
A monster in my pocket.
Fight for my pleasure.

>> No.4082894

Psychopath haiku

Is he a machine?
His face is still like a corpse.
His eyes are like holes.

>> No.4082896

Anime haiku

Anime is life.
Onii-chan.
Always together.

>> No.4082898

Two Brothers haiku

Eternally joined.
Two brothers quest together.
Searching for color.

>> No.4082901

Cat haiku

Cat ran away.
Into a world of obstacles.
Please call if seen.

>> No.4082902

Hiroshima Haiku

Fat Boy, Little Man.
Demons of death cut thru dust.
A cosmos unleashed.

>> No.4082904

>>4082901
not mine

>> No.4082907

Breaking Bad Haiku

Jesse the black knight.
Walter the wizard of blue.
Seals and stones bind them.

>> No.4082908

>>4082901
doppelganger

>> No.4082912

Suits haiku

Eye of Providence.
Making push button judgements.
History's masters.

>> No.4082913

Doppelganger haiku

He disguises himself.
Doppelganger.
Not mine.

>> No.4082918

That is all I have for now.

>> No.4082921

>>4082913
Another fake. not even a haiku.

>> No.4082929

Tonight

Set up their TV
Give lessons on idioms
Drink tea and don't sleep

>> No.4082935

Peace's Offer

Numbered 2 by 2
Divided lyrics, One tune
Triumphant whisper

>> No.4082942

Forever alone

Neurotic haikus
make me wish that I could write
erotic haikus.

>> No.4082944

If I was clever
I would just get in my bed,
not write bad haiku.

>> No.4082946

>>4082935
I deem you JoeJonJr

>> No.4082963

Royal words written
Prisoner of Wars released
Desolate no more

>> No.4082972

>>4082963
The future is bright.
Yet the dark ones still linger.
Now is always grey.

>> No.4082991

>>4082944
If he were clever
he'd use the subjunctive mood
for the figured past

>> No.4082993

colored flowers grew
at the hems of their black skirts
offerings at graves

>> No.4082999

ITT: westerners don't understand haikus

>> No.4083014

>>4082999
I write my haiku in a 5,7,5 format. I have read that this is not how the Japanese do it, but it was how I was taught.

>> No.4083017

>>4083014
I read that in japan its by the amount of sounds and not syllables.

>> No.4083019

>>4083014
The point of haikus or any other poems is not in the form, but in the message. In the way how argument is set.

>> No.4083027

one hour too late,
reminders carried by rain,
down through every drop

>> No.4083042

>>4083019
For me form adds a layer of fun to writing poetry. I also enjoy writing 6 word stories.

>> No.4083051

>>4083042
Yes, of course, but the thought should always be divided by the rules, it should not suffer because of the form.

Basically haiku should be a metaphor (in broadest sense): 1st line - vehicle, 2nd line - ground, 3rd line - tenor.

>> No.4083054

>>4083042
here is a 6 word story.
"Now is Green. Future is Grey."

>> No.4083064

>>4083051
Am I following this? I am still new to this.

>> No.4083075

>>4083064
This one is pretty much the best in those terms:
>>4082876

Others would be more of a metaphysical conceit, if I'd compare them to metaphors.

This one is decent too:
(nevermind, just saw that the cat one isn't yours)

But in general, don't listen to me, I'm fairly new to poems analysis and stuff.

>> No.4083079

>>4083075
cool. thanks

>> No.4083087

I have to say that this board is much more polite than /ic/

>> No.4083131

Does anyone here have a good source on what makes a good Haiku?

>> No.4083155

>>4083131
http://www.wikihow.com/Write-a-Haiku-Poem

>> No.4083177

>>4083155
Thank you (:

>> No.4083204

I was taught by my japanese mom that you need a word in your haiku that can be associated with one of the 4 seasons

>> No.4085713

>>4083204
she lied to you. If we consider the following haiku from Tokugawa shogunat, when haikus were first "invented". (Basically shortened from a short poem which was 5-7-5-7-7.)

tsuki ni e o
sashitaraba yoki
uchi wa kana

Unless of course I am mistaken and the moon (tsuki) is somehow connected to one of the seasons.

>> No.4085719

>>4083204
Short poem, tanka, did require something from nature/seasons in the first 2 or even 3 lines.

Example of that from Manyoshu:
haru tateba
kiyuru koori no
nokori naku
kimi ga kokoro mo
ware ni tokenan