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my story is interesting, page turning and generally good, but it ends without really being about anything. It's more of an exercise in futility than anything else. He runs and runs until he gets gunned down in the street.

Or I can change the ending, drag things out a bit and shift the tone of the entire bit, he gets abducted and killed by gladiatorial match more or less, but it ends with him still fighting.

what do?

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3793249

>>3793182

>> No.3793271

>>3793182
>but it ends without really being about anything.
End with some semi philosophical statement or insight that sounds like it should be profound but does nothing to end the ennui. I'd go with some variation of "One must imagine Sisyphus happy"

>> No.3793294

>>3793271
it's set in future china after a bit of a cultural collapse, is there a chinese/Indian version of Sisyphus to your knowledge?

>> No.3793314

>>3793271
think this fits the bill?

“Then I should have asked him how Sisyphus felt. At least his struggle ends in death,” the officer said as he tossed the bottle in the air. It caught the light just right to turn the sky orange for Akira for a brief moment. A cheap imitation of a sunset.

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>>3793249

these fucking pictures

>> No.3793358

>>3793318
http://fuuka.warosu.org/lit/thread/S3748579

>> No.3793389

>>3793358
>http://fuuka.warosu.org/lit/thread/S3748579
oh god this was saved? fucking bookmarked, I loved these

>> No.3793426

How long is your story?
Novel length, short story, etc?
If it is a novel, work on it for like another year. Yes, I know...
If it is a short story, work on it for like another week.
Both ways try and flush out more than one 'theme', and expound on it a bit, perhaps changing a single word to hint at yet another layer, etc, etc.
Either way, walk away from it for a few days and come back; with fresh eyes you're sure to see some way to add a bit of weight to your story.

>> No.3793444

>>3793426
about 6000 words, short story, just 'finished' it last night

just rewrote the end to be the philosophical shot in the street ending

guess I'll work on something else in the mean time