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So, writing a story. How do you show excitement in a question? Like: "How far do you intend to satisfy me?" The character is meant to be in somewhat of a battle-rage, and is charging at an enemy here. Is it feasible to write, "How far do you intend to satisfy me?!?"

>> No.2397752

Bumping because this board is ridiculously fast.

>> No.2397755
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>>2397751
Sounds like an awful story, OP.
The context should set all of it up.
That or be like Tom Wolfe and just use Exclamation Points! Everywhere!!

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>>2397752
HAHA, WHAT?

What you should do is

Peanut butter helmet charges, screaming with enthusiasm "Hey, you big dicked mother fucker, how far do you intend to satisfy me".

Also: Starship Troopers did whatever you're writing, but better...

and starship troopers is terrible/

>> No.2397772

1. Deep breath
2. Shout the words
3. Rewrite and repeat until it sounds more natural or the neighbours burn you out

>> No.2397776
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>>2397751
If your story is any good, nobody will care about you using ?!, !?, or ?!?. Seriously, you're not doing high school English homework here.

>> No.2397780

"An exclamation point is like laughing at your own joke. "
F. Scott Fitzgerald

>> No.2397783

>>2397776
except for all the well-read people and critics who will dismiss the entire piece as some sophomoric piece of shit if he feels the need to use punctuation to emote

>> No.2397802

Break up the quote to insert a verb the show how excited the character is.

"How far," she screamed. "Do you intend to satisfy me?!"

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>>2397783
>So, like, the three people on /lit/.

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>>2397810
>implying we even have one well-read person here.

>> No.2397818

"How far do you intend to satisfy me?" He ejaculated.

>> No.2397831

>>2397818
"How far do you intend to satisfy me?" he gaped open wide and waited for the other's insertion--which he hoped would come out in a forceful ejaculation.

>> No.2397878

>>2397751
This is a joke right?

Does your character happen to fight the enemy by getting raped or something? Because this sounds silly.

I'm not sure you can use the word 'satisfy' in a question expressing excitement without conjuring up images of sex.