/lit/ - Literature

>>21386212
things ( and people ) aren't popular because they are good. They are seen as good because they are popular. The inverse is also true. Also I guess, if you wnat to succeed commercially nowadays, you either need really good connections or adapt to the zoomer brain. Or maybe you are just horrible, and what is interesting to you isn't objectively all that good.

>>21386212
The most popular are always midrange quality. For it to be most popular, the most people need to like it, and that means appealing to the most people. Books that are too good are just as ignored as books that are too bad. It's not just books either. TV shows suffer this more than any other medium, and if there was justice in this world, I would be given the power to decide what gets cancelled and what gets revived.

Whoever fucktard said that "reddit spacing" is bad, just look at this bullshit wall of text.

Instead of having paragraphs and other "reddit" spacing to chunk your text into logical brackets, you have one gigantic fuck you wall of text.

But I will go on the long journey to answer this leftist-tier wall of text:
>but when others read it their dont have any reactions to it?
Stories depend on context and interest. Why do you care about Tolkien? If you are new, it's simply the hype, even though Tolkien is pretty meh written and weak in fantasy. If you write a story, no one has any reason to care.
>hey are not picking up on the interesting parts of it
If your whole story isn't interesting, you are trash at writing. Only after you are famous you can have chunky introductions and other filler stuff.
>I write multiple poems in an entire made up language I invented.
As a linguist I can tell you, that you are a retard. Languages are extremely complex. If you use a different language in your book, use an existing language, because learning languages is beyond insane if this language is just made up.

You violated pretty much any rule of writing. You want to force people to waste their time with your bullshit. If you can't deliver something amazing, and VALUE YOUR READERS TIME, you will never succeed.

This doesn't mean you can't use different languages or other stuff, just make sure that it's worth it. Made up languages are never worth it and I skipped every made up language in any book I read.
If you are desperate, just use Chinese. It has a fantasy tier writing and even the Tolkien picture is more or less a Chinese word.

>>21386250
One of the themes of my book is what peoples dresses say about them. In the climactic scene it is not a battle of good vs evil but about the main girl in it wearing a dress, and her enemy wearing a different dress. It is supposed to be shocking. They keep on making sarcastic comments at her until her enemy leaves the ball completely humiliated. It is a tension between what they are saying on the surface and what they are thinking.

Well when I explained this to the beta reader, he said, oh, that is what was happening? But I was making it really clear too. The only way to miss it is if you are dozing off while reading it.

>>21386281
sounds extremely east asian

>>21386274
yeah baka maybe I need better cover art to give them more excitement.

>>21386212
your shit

>>21386327
I bet that if I posted an excerpt, you would be impressed.

>>21386342
Go ahead weeb let's see what you got

>>21386342
we're waiting, anon

>>21386345
>>21386359
The ballroom was filled with anticipation as the guests arrived, their faces alight with excitement. The women wore beautiful dresses, each more lavish and ornate than the last.

Her heart ached as she watched the guests. She longed to join them, but being a servant, she was only there to clean after them.

Still, she watched. The women's faces were radiant with happiness, their voices filled with joy and laughter.

As the night went on, her heart grew heavier and heavier. She felt more and more out of place, and her spirits began to sink. But then, something happened. She caught the eye of a man across the room. She watched as he kept dancing with other girls, dancing closer to her, only to sweep the other way in one big circle. She could feel her heart pounding in her chest. Each time he switched girls, his dance was bringing him closer to her.

Right as the final dance brought him close enough to her to say hello, a terrible fire broke out in the ballroom. She was terrified, and she ran for the nearest exit. The handsome young man escaped out the other way, and she knew she would never see him again.

>>21386377
Average to below average prose, repetition (SHE SHE SHE SHE), female protagonist, constant breaking of the show don't tell rule and a generic sequence about poor girl wants rich boy

Of course no one is gonna be excited for this, it's the definition of middling

>>21386212
Dis is a berry kyut grill.

>>21386377
I think this needs to be more alive. Don't tell me the ballroom was filled with anticipation, show me. If the women's dresses were beautiful, tell me about them. The ornateness of these dresses increased? Why? Who were the wearers? This man she has seen, who has pierced her and made her forget her deepening feelings of alienation, are we merely going to pass over that moment no differently than the excited faces? The ballroom was filled with anticipation - for what? What were we as the readers anticipating? This! It was this moment! We need to SEE it! We need to feel what was so special about this man and his dancing that she is now consumed now, and when the terrible fire breaks out, we need to feel how unexpected this moment really was and how terrible the fire because we need to be IN the moment not being told about the moment.

This is the best I have for you at this moment. You at least have a clear story. This means you have the bones of your project; now you must create flesh.

>>21386377
lmao holy shit you write like a 13 year old girl.

>>21386377
esl peasant

>>21386212
>>21386377
The fact that you like Netflix shows is indicative of your writing ability. You like sloppy music so you write slop for literature.

>>21386212
>Why is the story that I wrote so great to me, but when others read it their dont have any reactions to it?
Different tastes. I've written shit I thought was garbage yet a number of people told me they cried reading it.
>I notice these these people will get really excited about a novel if other people are talking about it or it's marketed a certain way. I just want them to be excited in the same way.
Different tastes and senses of what is attractive. A few of my friends are published and I don't read any of their works. I only read shit that catches my eye independently. That's just how it is. There's no point in shilling your stuff to people you know - they'll either like it independently, or they'll have to force themselves to trudge through your stuff. Or they won't read it.
>>21386281
A little tip. Most people will NEVER catch onto obvious things. Ever. And I mean this, because I have tried. If you want every reader to catch onto every reference and subtle element, you will have to write it in a painfully obvious way. If you do that, however, your book will look more like a philosophy text than a work of fiction, and it will be boring. So, either spoonfeed the retards or impress the intelligent. One of the two. No offense to your friend - maybe he is very intelligent but just doesn't have a thing for fiction or for this specific thing.
>>21386377
I don't have the time to read this but I should advise you not to fall for any trolling if you end up on the receiving side of any.

>>21386377
ngl got a chub at the build up of anticipation in her saying hello to the handsome man