/lit/ - Literature

lmao

>>20592204
uh hello based department?

I'd definitely pay $30 for another page of this.

>>20592204
>Is this good writing?
>comma splicing
>brimstones
>invisible
>vetoed
no

>>20592277
How about this? He has a 4.9 rating and makes $150 per chapter.

>>20592298
>a dark smug
>spooky house
>blond
>Suddenly,

>she could hear the crackling sound of burning wood
>met by thick smoke emanating from within
then
>It seemed as though part of the building was on fire
no shit sherlock

i want to kill this person

>>20592204
>>20592298
The vocab is horrendous. Everything is written in such a boorish, predictable way that I feel this was genuinely a GPT-3 you cooked up right before posting. I could write a paragraph of criticism for every sentence in this atrocity.

>>20592298
>bedazzled used wrong
>past tense then present tense
>clunky as fuck
all in one line, very impressive

>>20592421
GPT-3 wouldn't make this many grammar mistakes

>>20592432
Here doesn't indicate time. It indicates space. Hit the books again you stinky ESL.

>>20592298
>has the facsimile of something pretentious using words like “smug” and “ominous.” Then immediately reveals itself as a fraud using the word “spooky”
This was written by a woman, worse yet, a woman of no measurable talent

>>20592854
He’s wrong but it still doesn’t change the fact that this is the type of writing I’d expect out of a second class YA novel. It’s just bad writing.

>>20592204
H-How powerful are the Cyber Gorillas?

>>20592868
That 'smug' was supposed to be 'smog' kek.

How do I get in on this racket?

>>20592915
For real. If people can write like this and get $30 per 500 words I could make so much money

>>20592900
dude they're invisible, apparently

>>20592204
This is peak midwit writing. Most of the people on this board would write like this, yet we can all agree we knew what was coming when he repeated „once again“.
This guy doesn’t even proof read his shit. I can’t believe anyone would pay him for that.

>>20593582
Write me just 150 words about cyber gorillas that is better than what is in OP’s post. You won’t and can’t, you coward.

>>20592900
Keked and checked

>>20592915
>>20592916
I'm confused as to why someone would pay to be fed garbage from Fiverr. Like why not just buy a bad book for $5? What is the appeal of this? Do they say "PLEASE write this idea I had"?

>>20593619
The cyber gorillas premise alone gives this guy his moneys worth, and they are invisible, holy based

>>20592204
No. It's not.

>>20592204
shiieeeett fucking hilarious. would read an entire 600 pager of this comedy gold.

>>20592298
>a dark smug
>standing alone in the deserted streets
>blond
>fervent heat
>met by thick smoke emanating.... it seemed as though part of the building was on fire

fucking kek. theyre lettign middle schoolers write on fiver?

>>20592204

>>20592915
Seconding this.

>>20592204
>Derek Hindenburg
>Derek
My immersion is already broken

>>20592204
No

>>20593635
They do custom commissions.

>>20592298
>a dark smug