/lit/ - Literature

Imagine the instant regret after OP pressed submit

>>20371977
Why would he regret anonymously posting some crap in an ocean of garbage?

>>20371977
Hopefully he will write us a poem about it.

>>20371977
>>20371979

>>20371960
>thou
Stopped reading here

>>20371960
Based and thou pilled

>>20371960
>2020+2 have bio cunt gf and not superior lady boy trad wife
ngmi

>>20371960
The use of thou in modern poetry would suggest that you now think less of this person, which if this was an intentional aesthetic decision for that reason, it's cringe as hell. Watch your punctuation.

>>20371960
Cringe as shit and English isn't even my main language.

>>20371960
Based, don't pay attention to the dilettantes

>>20371960
>THOU

If you wanna sound archaic and use “thou” you have to give your verbs the “-st” ending to make them agree baka

>>20371960
Be honest. OP, did you regret posting this?

>Further pursuits to bring the dead back to life is as futile as counting the grains of sand at the beach or the leaves of a tree.
based?

>>20371960
Take some notes.

1) Never write poetry when you emotional. It`s delicate work for the cold brain.
2) Try to not write about yourself when you are a beginner.
3) Don`t write poetry
4) Read at least 200+ poets before you start (or just greeks)

>>20375320
This is actually good advice

>>20371960
>rhyming "thee" with "tree"

>>20375320
>3) Don`t write poetry
Strong emphasis on this one, OP.

>>20374060
It's not based because necromancy is real and we live in the best age to be practicing it.

Old fag here. You need to grow up a bit more before you can write anything worth reading. Your poem is cringy. It is immature and rife with posturing.

I appreciate that you are trying to express yourself, but your work clearly demonstrates that you've never connected with any poetry of significant emotional depth.

I want you to try again, but you're not allowed to use any pompous wording. This will force you not to get caught up in the allure of "thou"s and "thus"s. You are imitating a style right now. That's why it's so bad. As soon as you throw down a few "thou"s, it reminds you of the form you are trying to intimate, and that blinds you.

Try again, under the conditions I set. I'll check back tomorrow.

>>20375540
If you have never written a cringe poem or love letter or the like you probably have had a very sad life. You seem far more pompous than OP.

>>20375572
No one here ever wrote a cringe poem.

>>20376119
I wrote a cringe poem when I was 14

>>20376152
i still write them sometimes. i dont think they're at all good and would kill myself if they ever got out LOL

>>20371960
thou art a fruit

>>20371960
Crisp

>>20376119
I think I wrote one in 9th grade, don't quite remember if there was a poem, pretty sure there was. Wrote a few cringe love songs and letters over the years.

>>20371960
>Thou
HAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

>>20375540
Made me cringe more than OP's shitty poem

>>20371960
based

O pee, ar' ya me?
I knoweth that feel
before thy poetry I kneel

>>20375540
No, this guys' right. Also >>20375320

>>20375540
This is the correct response.

>>20376351
>>20375572
These people could use his advice.
Gain some depth first.
Go back, try again.

poetry is gay write a script

>>20377904
Gain some perspective. You got to start somewhere and that somewhere is almost always cringe.

>>20377942
Yes. A start is just what it is.
Now follow his advice.

if you want to write poetry start extremely simple and follow basic rules of meter and rhythm what the fuck is this shit supposed to be

>>20377950
Yeah. Try writing a few good limericks. They have well-defined meter & rhymes, and are lots of fun.

>>20377946
You seem rather invested in defending (Him).

>>20377961
He's right. Response should be highlighted and followed by novitiates.

>>20372056
Kekked

I will say this: it's several steps above Vogon.

>>20371960
Shota are you alive??