/lit/ - Literature

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Stop making low-effort threads.

>>19786478
she looks like digi

>>19786478
5, 7, 6? Try again

>>19786478


THE LAST VERSE HAS AN EXTRA SYLLABLE; «PSYCHE» HAS TWO SYLLABLES, NOT ONE.

Richard B. Spencer
Nailed my nipples to a board
while I ate his ass

>>19786478
Greying out white marks
And rusted leaves stain the road.
The tramlines shiver.

Martin Luther King
Pulled out my teeth with pliers
And made me eat them

>>19786478
what the fuck, is this that girl that r9k simped for back in like 2015 or so? what the hell happened to her

>>19786478
this bitches eyes look like squishy olives dude

Niggers everywhere.
They act like they own the town.
I hate them so much.

>>19786495
>>19786498
Ha, psyche!

>>19786478
Many-legged serpent
Had Breath of a thunderstorm
Cut short by a blade

>>19786478
None of you know how to write a contemporary haiku. It's pointless writing these silly 5-7-5 ones. They always end up sounding incredibly contrived and artless.

>>19786495
>>19786498
faggots there is no hard rule on syllables and haiku sometimes do stray from 5/7/5. the main issues here are the lack of cutting word or seasonal reference

>>19786709


STRAYING FROM VERSE COUNT IS OK; DISREGARDING METRE DESTROYS THE FORM, AND IS NOT A HAIKU —OR WHATEVER THE GIVEN TYPE OF STROPHE— ANYMORE; ALSO: IT IS AN OBVIOUS ERROR; I DOUBT THAT THE ORIGINAL POSTER (YOU?) INTENDED THE LAST VERSE TO HAVE AN EXTRA SYLLABLE.

>>19786745
incorrect. they are not haiku because they lack cutting word/seasonal reference. meter doesn't matter, please research the subject

I FEEL MASSIVE CRINGE
OP IS STILL A FAGGOT
THINGS WILL NEVER CHANGE

>>19786763


HAIKU IS A TYPE OF STROPHE; STROPHE IS SHAPED BY VERSE COUNT, AND METRE; ONLY METRE IS INDISPENSABLE; KIREJI IS A SYNTACTICAL ELEMENT, NOT A METRICAL ELEMENT, THEREFORE, NOT AN ESSENTIAL FACTOR TO HAIKU; KIGO IS A THEMATICAL/TOPICAL ELEMENT, NOT A METRICAL ELEMENT, THEREFORE, NOT AN ESSENTIAL FACTOR TO HAIKU; KIGOKU (HAIKU WITH KIGO) CONSTITUTES A SPECIES OF HAIKU: NOT ALL HAIKU ARE KIGOKU; ALL KIGOKU ARE HAIKU.

>>19786593
“Seared into my —PSYCHE!”
So this is a comedic haiku?

>>19786709
The hard rules are all haikus have. You dare level that insult at me, when you’re the faggot?

>>19786802
you are describing senryuu, not haiku. some traditional haiku stray from 5/7/5 (one theorist explains this as the length of haiku being equivalent to a breath) and the idea of counting 'syllables' is retarded anyway because that is not a japanese term or system

>>19786840
>you are describing senryuu, not haiku.

SENRYUKU IS THE OTHER SPECIES OF HAIKU: NOT ALL HAIKU ARE SENRYUKU; ALL SENRYUKU ARE HAIKU.


>some traditional haiku stray from 5/7/5 (one theorist explains this as the length of haiku being equivalent to a breath)...

YES, AND POESY IS THE MUSE'S BREATH DESCENDING FROM THE ÆTHER INTO THE POET'S BODY.


>... and the idea of counting 'syllables' is retarded anyway because that is not a japanese term or system

WE ARE NOT WRITING IN JAPANESE.

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>>19786876
You're in every single one of these threads, yet you still haven't produced a single good haiku (or senryu, for that matter) yet. It's embarrassing, man. But I guess this board is for delusional non-writers and theorists, after all.

MAN I LOVE CHOKING ON MASSIVE NIGGER BALLS

Icy cold winter morn
Into great battle I ride
Skulls for the Skull Throne

>>19786876
>ALL SENRYUKU ARE HAIKU
incorrect, they differ based on the use of cutting word. both are a species of japanese poem.
>WE ARE NOT WRITING IN JAPANESE.
indeed, but there is nothing to say syllable is the equivalent of the on. it is an arbitrary transliteration of the form that empties it of its poetic function

>>19786932
6
7
4
1
Wut da fug mang?

I’m gonna end it
By OD-ing in a tub
Bye — bury it all

World shaking cold off
Yet I remain frozen here
Oh God please, thaw out

>>19786478
Let me see that ass
Clap, standing ovation bend
Over for a real one

>>19786478
The Hydrangea blooms
that flourish in the cool shade
wilt in the hot sun

>>19786478
Brown eyes beam but bare
Wants dark though pierced, parch though pale
May verdant life bloom

>>19787711
Sahjee?

>>19786478
Bitch, y'all look tired
a frog leaps into a pond
get some fucking sleep

>>19786478
Melting ice and snow
Spring, a season of progress
May the future yield

OP is a faggot
Gayer than a bag of dicks
What a queer

園庭や裸ナンテン雪うさぎ

A children's garden —
Heavenly bamboo plucked bare
Rabbits made of snow

>>19786478
OP be a fag
I count hunnids in da bag
Clip you wit da mag

The record spins. slowly,
Music plays softly, slowly,
Tears appear, slowly.

>>19791170
>6,7,5
FUCK

>>19791849
She seems very sweet
shame she became so deranged
wish she'd gotten help

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>>19786478
this is a Senryuu, not a Haiku. and the last verse has 6. 2/10

I hate this dumb bitch
Seriously fuck this cunt
Oh well so it goes

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>>19786825
mogged

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>>19786478
>Anne Frank's ballpoint pen
>Agatha baking cookies
>so many simp types

>>19786478
her eyes not like fire
my heart is compelled to sink
forgotten gotten

>>19786478
sat having a shit
smell the cheese rise from balls bleurgh
now time to wipe up

boy, is she ugly
given head since middle school;
and the makeup, too

>>19794240
iffy

Big red sunburned ass
Looking just like two apples
Tasty and juicy

>>19786478
Hottest one hundred
Is still racist tripe my son
E'en if cold July.

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>>19786478
Eww

Haiku I thought of some years ago

death death death death death
death death death death death death death
death death death death death

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Five hundred and ten
Five hundred and eleven
Five hundred and twelve

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>>19786478
Her moist moustache
Her slippery smile
White tears on cloth

I just want to die
Life is suffering and pain
Again and again

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>>19786478
Ain't this that bitch who can't even dress herself or some shit?

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>>19802582
not haiku

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aggie no!!

>>19786478
her piercings are horrible

Girl in the cafe
Does she know I exist?
God, please, I hope so

Her face was the sun
When I looked, I looked away
Beauty is so cruel

Another failure
I can feel my heart sense
A bitter winter

To see all of this
have to keep seeing
but when can I sleep

>>19786478
Dark cold lonely nights
I look at the moon and stars
Where are you, I brood

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Would a haiku self publishing poetry collection do well?

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Was Chuck’s Suck and Fuck
Yes he sold the farm to Sneed
Now Sneed’s Feed and Seed

>>19786478
Isn't this bitch autistic?

>>19788069
Best one in the thread

>>19811283
Yes

>>19810116
Not with the way you guys write them.
t.guy who just had his haiku/senryu collection accepted for publication

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Cherry blossoms fall
3 shots, 6.9 seconds
Brains in Jackie's lap

>>19786478

Her mind is empty
Her cunt always suppurates
She is a woman

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>>19786478
that uggo made me instantly hide the thread
Dug it out again to tell you about your poor taste.

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A sight to behold
the beauty of a young jewess
like spring in full bloom

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>>19786478
Niggers Could be here
He thought as the cool air blew
the sweat from his brow

>>19786478
take the metal out of her face and give her long straight hair and she looks exactly like my former psychologist. dead stare and all.

>>19786478
sneed
feed
seed

>>19786578
best one in this thread kek

>>19786478
bump

Magnetic vision
Electronic transmission
Hacks your tradition

If it was Kat you guys would’ve acted like fucking numales

>>19812432
Talk about a fucking rarity right there. She's cute. I'd fuck her after she changed her diaper

I dont know anything
The more learned the less is known
Richer ignorance

>>19817454
But what does it mean

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>>19786802

A name fag I spy
To other anons I cry
The threads gone awry

"It cannot be so,"
One Anon says from below
I shake my head no

"Anon my dear friend,
We have come to the end, for
namefags kill all fun."

>>19786478
>look mom i used the world psyche. im a poet now

>muh syllable count
for a literature forum it's kind of jarring that the vast majority of you have a grade-school understanding of haiku.

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>>19786478
Kike
Nigger
Faggot

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I spy with my eye
A lovable jewish doll
masking her beauty

>>19786478
lame

>>19786573
You actually tried. I like it.

>>19786478
Literally the worst "haiku" I've ever read

i will never forgive what they did to her bros

>>19786478
bigger fan of Limericks

>>19786478
barren trees between
thy delicate thighs of snow
winter, choke me too

>>19786478
I love little sisters
It can't be remedied
And the sun sets...

There is no metre because I'm a modernist poet.
There is no rhyme because I'm a modernist poet.
There is no related pic because I'm a modernist poet.
There is no intrinsic meaning because I'm a modernist poet.
There is metalanguage because I'm a modernist poet.
There is little sister because I'm a virgin.
Am I a virgin because I'm a /lit/ poster? Am I a /lit/ poster because I'm a virgin?
No. I'm a virgin because I'm a modernist poet.
No. I'm a /lit/ poster because I'm a modernist poet.
There is repetition because I'm a modernist poet.
There is metatext because I'm a modernist poet.
I'm a modernist poet, but you already know that.

>>19821449
the bags under her eyes betray a lack of sleep or an overstressed liver

>>19786478
I took a big poo
From it emmanated red
it broke my bum hole

>>19815958
Best post itt

Oral can't contain
The essence of our loving
Now, it's time to fuck.

>>19786478
what is she doing nowadays?
is she on insta?

>>19786478
that slut is so fucking ugly

Shawty is like a
Melody in my head

>>19815958
gigabased!

>>19824407
who is this whore?