/lit/ - Literature

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u niggas gonna steal my ideas aren't u

how neet are you? i havent left the house in at least 150 days

>>19347864
very NEET for 3 years concurrently, only left house for booze and smokes. Mostly NEET for around 15 years, having to fake a few courses and such to keep the welfare. never worked more than a couple days and that was when I was 16. I'm a veteran I believe

>>19347864
u don't leave for food?

>>19347885
>concurrently
*consecutively

>>19347888
live at home still (neetbux here dont even cover half of the average rent price) so no need to ever leave the house. it's just interesting to me when people talk about being neet/hiki and i always wonder quite how shut off from the world they are in comparison to myself
>>19347885
definitely a bit further along than myself then
i dropped out of college coming up on 10 years ago now (in about 2 months actually), had one job in that time which i held for about 6 months before walking out lmao

I like the voice, but it's a bit too "gruff" for my liking. Not everything needs to be fetid.
Classic young male writing style, an attempt at Joyce with the tinge of being a real bruiser druggie.

>>19347915
Also, since the rule is write what you know, I don't think you, OP, need to question if people here are stealing your "idea." I'm sure we're all well-acquainted with loneliness, internet depravity, and drug use.
Writing about internet use is weird... why read a writer writing about the web, when the writer can just imagine scenes that take place without the lens of the shut-in narrator, and we can just browse the internet ourselves to receive an experience akin to the fractured narrative that seems to be taking precedent?

>>19347915
yeah I get that criticism. need to find a way to be more honest, and not make my posturing so obvious. never read Joyce tho

>>19347932
not sure, and I struggled with that but my the terminally-online experience is so ubiquitous. I try to avoid using any topical internet language or neologisms. but like you said, write what you know, and my experiences are borderline incel shut-in

>>19347540
trying too hard mate

>>19347906
live at home means live with parents? I lived with my mother but that shit drove me insane and I drank more than ever. arrested a lot etc.
atm I signed up to uni so I can live in student housing in my 30's, weird situation

>>19347948
yes I fear I am capper

>>19347540
This unironically reads like some extremely vulgar version of poetry because I legitimately can't make sense of it. The words seem to be ordered according to some logic but it's just incomprehensible. Incredible.

>>19348057
>he words seem to be ordered according to some logic
I hope so, studying grammar and language while I try to write

Actually pretty fun, but it’s obviously tryhard as fuck. Kinda fits with the truth, that you are tryhard as fuck, grasping for meaning to align your neet reality with your self image. Being aware of that doesn’t change the fact of its truthfulness.
Is there going to be any through plot? It would be hard to read a novels worth of this stuff, even if it is fun in small doses.

>>19347540
extremely annoying style

>>19348388
well yeah it's not a 1:1 with my thoughts. I'm trying to make fun of the type of person I am

>>19348388
would have to flesh out some plot yeah

>>19348388
>align your neet reality with your self image
yes good. that's the whole thing

Sorry OP but Mike Ma did it first. The ranting 4chan schizo market is only so big and if I really want more I can just come to this hellhole and fill up on memes and degeneracy. Maybe you can write in this style for a limited number of chapters and then have more "lucid" chapters where you write in a more dignified style but a whole book like this would get be very easy to set down and never read again.

>>19347543
I like your writing anon. I wish you luck in getting published. I hope your character is well read because if not it comes across as false.

>>19347885
just realised im a normie

>>19349949
It's not too late to change your filthy normoid ways.

>>19351211
not too late for you