/lit/ - Literature

are you in the slow class?

>>1732937
Well I was...

Congratulations, you've read the fucking book. I'm still not seeing analysis.

>>1732937
You jell you can't make such beautiful words in a profoundly impacting way?

>>1732945
>conclusion
>analysis

OP is clearly 15

>>1732946
Thanks for backing me up, anon, but now that I look at it it really is pretty bad... oh well.

>>1732949
Oh, right. Still, it's a very basic conclusion that suggests you haven't delved very deeply into the book. It lacks depth and originality to the point I would consider it plagiarism if I were I high school English teacher. And yes, you are very clearly 15.

>>1732957
>were I
"were a", rather.

>thinks BNW is a warning
>doesn't understand that its a satire novel

>>1732966

Satire is quite frequently cautionary in its intention, what are you getting at?

>>1732966
I have a picture to show you friend.

>We have become a society dependent on technology and a slave to pleasurable experiences. These were the epitomic fears of Huxley. When he wrote Brave New World back in the early 1930’s, Huxley was acting as wise sage and fortune teller. He looked around him, and he saw the very early stages of the “utopia” he created in Brave New World. Now, in the 21st century, about eighty years after Brave New World was published, the “early stages” have advanced quite considerably to a point that I would not call the full extent of Huxley’s vision, but rather a point very close to it.

1. If you cut out the first part of your first sentence, it would read we have become *a slave* parallelism my boy, it should be slaves. I would rewrite the entire first sentence though.

>These were the epitomic fears of Huxley

2.Why write in passive voice, it makes you look weak. "These were Huxley's epitomic (which makes you look like you looked up Word synonym's btw) fears."

>wise sage and fortune teller

He was really doing none of those things. Sages don't predict the future, and fortune tellers makes him seem like a carnie.

>He looked around him, and he saw the very early stages of the “utopia” he created in Brave New World.

Using "looked" after epitomic makes your voice less coherent. Also, for analysis' sake, he probably did not see his time as a very early version of utopia. He saw it as *exactly* like the utopia - that's the point of an allegory. He wasn't predicting the future, he was describing the present.

>.. I would not call the full extent of Huxley’s vision, but rather a point very close to it.

See the previous comment - you're showing that you didn't really understand the book when you write this. It's not a prediction of the future, it was a lens for the present. Huxley wasn't writing for the 21st century, he was writing for his own time.

>>1732972
Well shit, thanks for the review, but this being a high school essay, and my teach being a very easy grader, I'll just leave it as is.

>>1732910
oh i didn't realize we've cured world hunger, disease, and war

>>1732968
Huxley gives an account of human nature, based on what we may as well be. To depict his portrayal as just a warning doesn't acknowledge the real ideas behind the story.
Op has taken the story at face value.

>>1732978

You're going to have to learn how to write sometime...

>>1732982
Yeah, it's like saying "1964 WAS AN ATTEMPT BY ORWELL TO WARN US OF THE DANGERS OF A TOTALITARIAN GOVERNMENT AFTER HE GOT THE SHIT SCARED OUT OF HIM IN THE USSR." It's so basic that you're going to look stupid.

>>1732989
>1964

>>1732989

I believe you mean "an totalitarian government."

>>1732995
Nope. "A" is correct.

>>1732982
Well to be fair, the prompt asked me to write if I agree or disagree that Huxley's vision is more relevant today than Orwell's.

>>1733002

If thats the case, your conclusion still sucks. It doesn't even mention your argument against Orwell.
When you argue a case, you need to be charitable to its opposition in order to strengthen your claims and demonstrate that you understand the issue.
But whatever, its high school. You'll probably get a B, and be average for the rest of your life.

>>1733010
I also should mention that since we only read BNW and not 1984, my teacher said to forget about Orwell, and only focus on Huxley.

>>1733015

Your teacher sounds like an utterly retarded piece of shit. Go find a better school holy shit

>>1733016
It might sound better in context. We were given a sheet that had what is written in the pic there >>1732971
and we were asked to basically compare what he said about Huxley to today's world in an either agreeable or disagreeable fashion.