/lit/ - Literature

>>16595989
Roar of the ocean
The boat flails in the flurry
Clouds give way, sunlight

idfk sry time to hide this post

All things are numbers
But your face is perfect there
Your cooking’s the Lord

>>16595989
ballsack ass nigga
i dont trust chinks its the eyes
look at these digits

>>16595989
The hawk in the rain
Perched upon a broken branch
Fly away sweet thing

>>16596137
This was really beautiful anon :)

The man I once was
Selfish and narcissistic
He pushed her away

>>16595989
A life lived for wealth
What will you do when you die?
Cant take it with you

>>16595989
Self-conscious of them
Now I seek his approval
The man in the glass

>>16595989
Only through hurting
Can you understand the pain
That others feel also

>>16596246
inb4 I'm a retard and can't count syllables

>>16595989
I hate my ego
Inextricably bound to
So contemptible

>>16596253
>>16596246
The last line has six syllables.

>>16596253
doesnt matter I think there can be flexibility in Haikus. BTW, I really liked it

>>16596321
>I think there can be flexibility in Haikus

So HAIKU is a lesser form of poetry to you?

I'm gay
Never did I understand
the pleasure of buttfucking

Without the sound
The tree has no direction
Can you hear it yet?

>>16595989
shut the fuck up, bitch
shut your cocksucking whore mouth
you shit-eating cunt

>>16596149
good

>>16596212
leave it for others

>>16596226
hm

>>16596246
other people are idiots, they live lives of pleasure and rarely experience pain

>>16596347
2
7
7

>>16597571
4
7
4

The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.

>>16597699
Mine was 4/7/5 but either way keeping strictly to 5/7/5 is quite pseud of you

>>16595989
Impossible things
Writhing and swirling inside
Mind torn asunder

How about some one word haikus? Here is one I have been working on for 4 years

Birchwood

>>16597699
idiot you know nothing of haiku of you think it's syllable counting.

>>16596316
read above

>>16596137
this is the only (senryu) in this thread. everything else is nowhere close to the true form.

>>16598232
That's how meter works, pal. It's not optional. If you can't metrify, either don't compone poetry, or get better.

>>16598935
read >>16598934 dummy

>>16598938
>>16598934


HAIKU POETRY WAS INVENTED IN THE NINETEENTH CENTURY, DERIVED FROM RENGA POETRY, WHICH WAS NOT THEMATICALLY PARTICULAR.

FOR HAIKU TO INCLUDE NATURALISTIC IMAGERY, OR CONCEPTS, IS ENTIRELY NOTIONAL, NOT NORMATIVE; PARADOXICALLY, IT IS SENRYU POETRY WHICH SHOULD BE NORMATIVELY NATURALISTIC, SINCE «SENRYU» MEANS: «RIVERWILLOW»; HAIKU POETRY IS & SHOULD BE THEMATICALLY GENERAL.

Autumn's rolling mists,
Cloaking shapes of dancing pines,
Heralding the chill.

The cloud covered sky
And the blur in my mind’s eye
Are just your Goodbye

Dying willow trees
I pass as I go fishing
Is the sea too cold?

I wish I could speak
As basho or like Dante
But I am nothing

Where is my cold mountain?
And Alph, that sacred river?
Cities feel lonely

There is a brown leaf
damp wind blew it in my pot
Goodbye pot of beef

>>16599055
are you fucking retarded? Basho, which is the latest date you could say "haiku" flourished in the 17th century you pseud. It wasn't 'derived' from renga; they were called haiga no renga because there are simply the introductory verse of a renga without the rest. Everything in your post is wrong; stop putting your western dick in everything.
>should include naturalistic imagery
are you talking about the kigo idiot? and what the fuck is that garbage about SHOULD? Do you just believe everything you read? Do you have a thought in that hallow head? I called it a senryu because WESTERNERS can only ever write senryu because they lack the tie to tradition: to renga. You blindly follow rules because you don't understand the tradition or the history and because of that you will always be irrelevant.

>>16599183
>Dying willow trees
>I pass as I go fishing
>Is the sea too cold?
I really like this one.

>mountain mist soda
>crack it open take a sip
>It's alright I guess

IN CHRIST’S CHRYSALIS

YOUR FIRE TURN TO LIGHT, AND BLOOM,

GREEN CATERPILLAR.


« 零 »

>>16597699
>474
wrong it's 475

>>16598338
cool poem buddy

>>16599055
quit being aesthetic tripfag, it makes your gay posts difficult to read.

>>16599431
>his "haiku" is a christian allegory
o i am lafin
you're a living caricature

>>16599431
5
8
5

>>16599479


«FIRE» HAS ONE SYLLABLE.

>>16599505
Why do you write like a schizophrenic? And why aren't you banned yet?

>>16599505

It’s usually pronounced and said said with 2 even if there’s ways to categorize it as a singular syllable. I say this knowing I messed up one of my own, maybe switch fire for flames

>>16599518
because he thinks he's a cool trip-user if he has a gimmick.

Abominable
Triskaidekaphobia
Trigonometry

>>16599525


«FIRE» HAS ONE SYLLABLE; MISPRONUNCIATIONS ARE UNIMPORTANT.

>>16599505
fye-urr

>>16599525
I kind of like you dude, but seriously ditch the fetishistic conviction for the 5/7/5 form. Evaluate it with a cool head: its too goddamn wordy in English: its just bloated. Its a historical holdover and japanese and english do not have the same weight. ditch it already or im gonna lose my patience.

>>16595989
Mátate, pedófilo

>>16599541
>fye-urr
thank you

>>16599542

Of course, I’ve read up on it more since last thread I’m simply using the form here because it’s the thread’s theme

>>16599630
I see. :) thank you for respecting the form

sunset in rearview
asphalt spread beneath the wheels
it is for the birds

Autumn leaves crinkle
Erotic fabrics wrinkle
In little schoolgirls' skirts

>>16599817
5
7
6

try "inside schoolgirls skirts"

>>16596131
good concept needs work. ditch contractions please anon. hope to hear back soon.
>>16599065
sweet and simple as it should be. thank u.
>>16599415
>>16599534
Good. maybe a haiku is supposed to be serious but it's really no sacred cow and it's better to be fun than to be a tryhard. there is great value in mirth. keep it going it's really cool.

everything else in this thread is whiny masturbation or just bad, high school level amateurism.
>>16599787
I did this so you can judge me based on it.

>>16599817
fuck off whitman

>>16599817
I'll try again.

Spring blossoms bloom
My withered hunk looms
Outside kindergarten

open up your mouth
i long for the cherry red
residing within

buckets of chlorine
waves at edge of porcelain
i lay back in wait

crimson and clover
and i don't hardly know her
beautiful feeling

Sunflowers at night
August coming to an end
forever golden

Catch my breath and heart
Her skin beneath silken veils
Tempts fervent longing.

>>16595989
>S O Y

An old silent pond
A frog jumps into the pond—
Splash! Silence again.

Branches dance slow
Smoke escapes the window
Tomorrow, try

>>16600229
>Fervent longing tempts.

ftfy

>>16599846
tanks

>>16600413
Thanks mate

>>16595989
she places her watch,
on the table next to her,
facing endless death.

The mountain trembles
The ocean shivers and moans
The hole in my heart

>>16595989
Empathy has died
I cut out their tongues and eyes
Weakness shall depart

Does anyone else suck cock?
And drunk cum?
I alone am homosexual (in spring)?

>>16598346
I'm holding back tears............
this haiku is so powerful

>>16595989
Este poema sería idóneo para enviárselo a alguien

>>16595989
write a gay haiku?
not a fucking chance dickhead
OP confirmed fag

I have no words for
this travesty of a being
god plays favorites

stagnant water broke
frog leaps on spider lily
cotton drifts downstream