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>wrote my first poem yesterday while I was drunk
>It felt really well-written while alcohol was pumping my IQ down.
>Now that I am sober, I find it to be absolute shit.
How can I cope?

>> No.16461387

>>16461384
Poast it

>> No.16461388

I have been practising writing for 14 years and still cringe at every word I type

>> No.16461401

Yeah it happens to me too when i'm lacking sleep. You got down 15 spatial IQ points and produce accordingly, When you're on your good days it look like shit and cringe.

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16461412

>>16461387
I wish I could but I can't, it is as cringe as it gets, first of all because it is a love poem for my lass, and then because it is badly written and full of cringe. Besides, it's written in French.

I think I will burn the paper

>> No.16461436

>>16461384
Figure out what makes it bad and then rewrite it.

>> No.16461448

>>16461412
poast its what anonymous imageboars are for

>> No.16461449

>>16461387
>>16461412
Okay, it's anonymous board so here we go. Translated first verse and censored.

beauty of your eyes
there crystal clear fear lies
to the extent I cannot hold
this stick long and bold
for I have come to say
*name*, you make my day
and for what You may ask
for my long and bold mask

>> No.16461454 [DELETED] 

>>16461412
Poast it I’m from Mtl

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>>16461449
I am the OP and this is not my poem.

>> No.16461481

>>16461449
wait so translated it rhymes as well? I think you might be a genius OP. Unless you're lying. About it ever having been written in French. Or of you even being OP.
But you would never do that, would you? Would you, anon?

>> No.16461484

>>16461384
edit it?

>> No.16461553

>>16461456
post it, faggot.

>> No.16461558

>>16461449
Change 'mask' to 'cock' and be honest with the reader for a change