/lit/ - Literature

I don't like you and I don't like your thread. saged.

>>13113550
pretty neat

>It don't mean anything so it's deep
If he understood that at only 8 he will be successful in life

>>13113550

If that’s really by an 8 year old kid then he should really receive inspiration and materials to further develop his capacities, because he has great talent, no doubt about that. The image of the flash flood and the iguana are very good, and the end line “I am noon” is extraordinary.

>>13113588

>>13113595
M8, there is nothing extraordinary about young people with talent.
Fucking Rimbaud FINISHED his literary career by the time he was 19.

>>13113601

good handwriting for an 8yo

>>13113588
Try living in Africa at noon.

i'm a tiger in a mall
i'm an old lady in a stall
like a summer shower
or maybe a whisper
i'm tired
i'm done

r8

>>13113603
Dumb frogposter

I'm like a mudslide, I'm like Virgin Islands of the United States and I'm a quarter to six

Ok now give me the recognition that I deserve

>>13113550
https://www.google.com/search?q=creulen
What is Creulen mean?
Image says it is roblox character

>>13113612
pretty bad

>>13113550
I'm a tiny bit skeptical about the visual symmetry and these line breaks belonging to a kid.

Tone and intention of the message text identify the insufferable faggot who wrote it, though.

>>13113655
he means cerulean

I don't get it? What's good about it? it's just a bunch of disconnected images

>b-but hes just eight!
Who cares, it doesnt make the poem better

>>13113651
he means cerulean

>>13113595
>>13113603
You deserve death

>>13113620
Very clever anon you seem very clever indeed. Everybody come here and look at this fellow's incisive wit and deft humorism

>>13113679

>>13113663
>I don't get it? What's good about it? it's just a bunch of disconnected images


Imagery is by far the greatest aspect of poetry. Is more important than metrification, more important than rhythm, more important than rhyme, assonance, alliteration. All those things are important (well, sometimes you don’t need to use them: see free verse, or the poetry of the ancient Greek and Romans and most of Shakespeare, that don’t use rhyme), but imagery is really what sets poetry apart from most of the daily and serviceable prose.

A poem might be just a succession of images about a certain theme, but, if the images are striking and inventive, the work will be justified and pleasurable. See this sonnet about prayer (just several metaphors on the subject of Prayer):

Prayer I, by George Herbert

Prayer the church's banquet, angel's age,
God's breath in man returning to his birth,
The soul in paraphrase, heart in pilgrimage,
The Christian plummet sounding heav'n and earth
Engine against th' Almighty, sinner's tow'r,
Reversed thunder, Christ-side-piercing spear,
The six-days world transposing in an hour,
A kind of tune, which all things hear and fear;
Softness, and peace, and joy, and love, and bliss,
Exalted manna, gladness of the best,
Heaven in ordinary, man well drest,
The milky way, the bird of Paradise,
Church-bells beyond the stars heard, the soul's blood,
The land of spices; something understood.
The poem on the OP shows some quite inventive metaphors, especially for a young kind. He dosent simply say “I’m the sea”, or “I’m a river”, but actually makes the image specific: a flash flood. He doesn’t simply says that he is like most well-beloved animals (lions, tigers, dogs, cats, horses), but actually chooses the Iguana (not an obvious choice), and individualizes the Iguana, who is “tired after a big swim”.

Then there’s the last image of “I am noon”. It’s a simple image, yet I have never seen other poet use this great symbol as self-definition. What better way to describe a vivid, positive, energetic, happy person than with the image of the sun in the top place in the sky, with all its glory, dissolving every single shadow with its flood of light?

And all of that from – presumably – an 8 year old child. For me it shows great potential.

>>13113550
why do american kids write so fucking ugly? its shit even for an 8yr old

>>13113732
America is a fundamentally anti-expression, anti-beauty culture. Every male child begins their life in America by having their genitals mutilated to prevent them from feeling sexual pleasure. This is the kind of stuff that has serious permanent implications for a person's ability to express themself.

>i want to describe myself like a flash flood in maine
can somebody explain this for the non-americans

>>13113740
>Mfw people are actually taking the bait

>>13113745
????????

>>13113550
unironically based and solar pilled, this kid is tapped into the godhead

poetry is over. he won.

>>13113740
like a flash flood in the black forest of germany

Nael would destroy this kid

>>13113840
like a flash flood in your mums panties at my presence

we don't get flash floods where i'm from

I know someone here will pull the plug.
And I'll be watching.
There's no malice in it.
Finally things will just be.

I wrote this while browsing a shitty uncle Ted thread.
Some anon said it was good, that I was talented.
Please tell me it's not true.
Please.

>>13113872
It's a flood that happens quickly.

You fucking idiot.

>>13113601
Rimbaud (second to the left)

>>13113877
The anon that told you it was good was probably Rupi Kaur undercover researching for her new poetry book on toxic masculinity

>>13113612
Zen's poem is better.

>>13113879
i know what flash floods are but why would he want to describe himself quickly and why maine?

>>13113893
I looked it up and no notable flash floods have ever been recorded in Maine. This kid needs to do his research better.

>>13113897

>>13113897
King is from Maine and mentions it in every story.

>>13113732
let's see your handwriting

Can someone tell me how I can tell when a poem is good or not ? I've never truly gotten into poetry before

>>13113897
Flash floods happen literally everywhere on the east coast. Just because it's not katrina doesnt mesn it doesnt happen retard

>>13113897
that's a boldfaced lie

>>13113550
Why is everyone ok with the kids name being Zen?

>>13113936
why wouldn't we be

>>13113550
damn that's good as fuck, as good as Nael maybe

I WAS BORN
IN A SMALL VILLAGE
I WAS JUST A CHILD
WHEN THE SOLDIERS CAME

>>13113550
I won + to describc
myse if kike a flash
flooo in Maine, like a-a
marine igavna tired
atter a big
swim, dike jouth Dakota,
like krillin. When I'm
by myselfm I'm a
Golder eagle, I'm falli
I'm a baat, I'm a
wolfc , I'm noon.
By: Zen

lol
Not bad for an kiddo.

we stan our child kings

>>13113969
audibly laughed

>>13113663
PLEASE do not post images of my wife on this circassian horse tamer's site.

>>13113729
Haha are you serious? First of all, the defining feature of "Roman" poetry is meter. So right off the bat you're a pseud. Second of all his poem has almost nothing to do with Herbert, which is metered and rhymed.

And the much lauded imagery? It has everything to do with:

I am a mountain,
I am a tall tree, oh
I am a swift wind
Sweeping the country
I am a river,
Down in the valley, oh
I am a vision
And I can see clearly
Etc.

By Sir Robert Kelly

>>13113550
This is a bad poem. It’s exactly the sort of poem precocious 8 year olds are expected to write: just a string of dumb similes with line breaks. I’m pretty sure my mom has a whole box full of poems like this my brother and I wrote in elementary school.

I do like the “I am noon” line though.

>>13113949
Implications? Besides making the poem seem more fake. His white skinned, pink haired parents think they are so very clever with their peace loving child bringing harmony to the earth instead just making the Asian kids cringe.

>>13113911
it has nice juxtaposition of images

also if it has nice meter if you're a afag

>>13114103
it's short for zenon

>>13114165
...is that better? Ok, sorry they aren't hippies, but ufo cultists.

>>13114184
it's an old greek name. god, be open to other cultures.

>>13114210
HAha! Are you the parent? Post hair.

>>13113737
>tfw uncircumsized

>>13113732
they're taught typing instead of penmanship because it's objectively a more useful skill

>>13114220

We got a similar assignment in high school. The teacher basically gave you a template to fill in/customize a bit and then you had your poem. I did exactly the opposite of what the template told me to do to take the piss and the teacher said "wow I really like that poem Anon".
Modern poetry is complete bullshit.

>>13114265
I love it when a plan comes together.

>>13114288
Anon...its not your fault

>>13114288
cool story

>>13114300
>>13114301
I now remember a line it had that went something like "I am being punished because I'm innocent" and the teacher loved it although it was the opposite of what the template told you to do. There are no objective measures for what's good. Not even standards to measure how technically good it is. It's pure relativism.

>>13114310
i made a crumble in home economics and the teacher said mine was the best one