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1307444 No.1307444 [Reply] [Original]

WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THIS?

>> No.1307465

I think.... sage.

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>>1307465

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>>1307473

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>>1307475

YOUR MOTHER.

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>>1307477

>> No.1307481

It's shit, but what else did I expect from a tripfag.

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>>1307481

QUALITY; GOOD TASTE; INSIGHTFULNESS; GENIALITY; AWESOMENESS...

>> No.1307489

>>1307481
COME AT ME, BRO

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>> No.1309026

>>1307483

I expected good grammar, but apparently semi-colons are just too pretentious to resist for some people.

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>> No.1309074

IF YOU KNEW SOME GRAMMAR YOU WOULD KNOW THAT COMAS ARE "WRONG" WHEN IT COMES TO WRITING "A LINE OF ITEMS".

COMAS ARE USED IN THOSE CASES ONLY WHEN YOU HAVE TO INCLUDE "SUBITEMS" IN THAT "LINE OF ITEMS".

FOR EXAMPLE:

A HOUSE; THE SKY WITH CLOUDS, BIRDS, MOTHMAN, AIRPLANES, ETC; A BUILDING; A CAT.

GET IT?

>> No.1309077

>>1309026

Semi-colons have their place. This attitude that semi-colons are only ever used to be pretentious is fucking stupid. It's like you take your writing advice from Vonnegut.

>> No.1309104

shup up koz it's not like you're good for anything but greentexting and rolling stone reaction images

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>>1309104
>shup

ffffuckkkk

>> No.1309107

>>1309074

No, it's okay to use commas for a list. Semi-colons are only required when there's a break in the series.

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>>1309104
>greentexting and rolling stone reaction images
>MFW

>>1309107

NO.

COMMAS ARE REQUIERD WHEN THERE IS A BREAK IN THE SERIES.

>> No.1309126

4 semicolons in a row just looks ugly, I don't care what you say. Use a hyphen - a full stop. A question mark? Anything but 4 fucking semicolons. . .

>> No.1309137

>>1309114

If the individual items of a list are long, complex, affixed with description or themselves contain commas, semicolons may be preferred as separators, and sometimes the list may be introduced with a colon. (Wikipedia)

No, you're wrong.

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>>1309126

THERE YOU HAVE IT, YOU COMPLAIN OUT OF SHEER VISUAL DISGUST NOT GRAMMATICAL NORMS; YOU FAILED.

ANONYMOUS: 0

KOZ: 1

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>>1309126

>> No.1309155

>>1309140

No, because my writing doesn't look like something that used to line a stomach. Look at your post; it's hideous. . . this post looks lovely. Your post is ugly.

>> No.1309164

>>1309155

YOUR POST LOOKS LIKE ANY OTHER IN THE HUNDREDS OF THOUSANDS POSTS FLOWING IN 4CHAN; PLAIN AND GENERIC.

>> No.1309169

>>1309164

Look at your post. Now back to mine. Sadly, your post isn't mine.

>> No.1309180

>>1309169

LOL I couldn't put it better myself. Tripfag, your posts really are very ugly. Also, try to be more sparing in your use of the semicolon. It grates.

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>>1309169

LET THE BUTTHURT FLOW THRU YE.

>> No.1309264

>>1307444
nice job tripsfag. i think this is good, compelling writing. it attracts attention, which is more than one can say about most writing.
I don't get the dubai references. are you from there? in fact, i don't get what you're talking about at all. some of this sounds like song lyrics, it's so wishy washy and onamonapia-y.
But i like it.
I guess it's confusing and vague, so maybe you should try for more of a subject, but it's nice, and within the whole there were a few moments that seemed to mean something. "fare well!" at the end struck me for some reason; also references before that to a child.

>>1309169
>>1309180
hey prissy 19-th century faggot you do not belong here, i can tell by the way you write. your posts actually are way way way uglier than tripsfag, know why? because they're written by retarded trolls. GTFO LIT NOW ---- YOU DO NOT BELONG HERE

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>>1309264

WELL, AT LAST SOME ACTUAL CRITIQUE!

OK.

THE "DUBAI REFERENCES" ARE PUNISHMENT; THE WHOLE TEXT IS FULL OF PUNS.

DUBH = GAELIC FOR "DARK".

I = PERSONAL PRONOUN

DUBAI = SIMBOLIZING, HERE, A PLACE SICKNESS WHICH RELATES TO THE "BLACK EYE" REFERENCE AT THE BEGINNING.(?)

>> No.1309668

I liked it. Sounds like a once-smart person who's gone insane. This turning into a trollin' and flamin' thread makes me feel bad.

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>> No.1310591

Are you using different languages? If so, why? Significance?

I don't understand. It sounds pretty good though, I guess. Want to talk me through some of the bits you like?

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>>1310591

I ONLY USED ENGLISH; GAELIC; GREEK; SPANISH AND GERMAN.

NINETY FIVE PERCENT OF THE TEXT IS IN ENGLISH.

>> No.1310605

>>1310601

Oh, five languages, is that all? You're letting yourself down...

>> No.1310640

>>1309320
Interesting, thanks.
It reads a lot better with those notes and makes more sense. (I'm not exactly a poetry reader).
Now it's giving me the image of a stream of a consciousness in a child who' been injured in an accident, a fall or some rough-housing maybe... trips/capsfag is successful.

>> No.1310708

>>1310640

YEAH, WELL, NOT EXACTLY THAT SIGNIFICANCE BUT GIVEN THE AMBIGUITY OF THE TEXT, THEN, YOU CAN "INTERPRET IT" IN MORE THAN ONE WAY; I THINK.

>> No.1310744

I like it. Extremely Dada, which is a good thing.