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Hello /lit/. I posted a couple poems a couple weeks ago written by some kid I am friends with on Facebook. People praise him to death about "how good" he is a writing poems. I decided to come back to post a new one her just put up because I think you guys will get a kick out of it....will paste it in next post of mine

>> No.1237455

Got me So High

Stuck Up in a Trance

Depression can Die

Caught in a Dance
In the Sky Flying

I'm so Euphoric

All I'm Doing is Trying

Our Love is Chronic
My Love is Crying

All It does is Yearning

All the Sorrow, Dying

All I do is Learning
One Big Gambit

On It, I'd Bet my Soul

Our Lives, I'd Never Forfeit

I Sacrifice, No Matter the Tol

>> No.1237459

>>1237455
6/10, nothing inherently bad about it structurally.

>> No.1237476

>>1237459

Structurally no but the diction I personally think sucks.

>> No.1237478

poemz r 4 fags XD

>> No.1237486
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1237486

breaking news vidya general is a closet structuralist

haha not fucking likely

barthes was a good looking guy in his youth

>> No.1237487

>>1237478

I never said this kid was normal...
I don't hate him for being creative, I just don't like that he has not improved in like 6 months and people still think he is amazing.

>> No.1237493

this poem fucking sucks

0/10

i usually give nice grades too

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1237497

>>1237455
o look another poem about wuv.
awesome.

>> No.1237499

>>1237487
While he's doing something creative and productive, you are making snide posts on 4chan. You are the loser in this situation. And you are probably a loser in every other situation too.

>> No.1237502

>>1237499
So being the ONE person that criticizes his poems when countless others say how good it is, sounds like a good idea yes?

>> No.1237505

>>1237499
lul

god i hate people like you with that attitude "better to do something than nothing."

>> No.1237506

>>1237499
Oh the irony.