/lit/ - Literature

>>23270589
Anon, you've given me hope. I'm gonna give it a shot. We'll see what happens.

>>23132583
>>23132870
>>23132889
Anon, I've given this a read.

I'm blown away by the creativity on display here. This is a lot of original thought, original ideas, original imagery. While still paying homage to certain classical ideas--Cronus, for one, being in charge of the sinners on Saturn was a nice touch. I liked the idea that all sorts of souls, including the souls of nonhumans, made it out into space.

If there's anything I'd change it's mostly stuff about grammar and syntax. There are things that I might have phrased in a different way.

Also, another thing is that you need to be clearer that your protagonist, the sinner, is from Mars, not Earth. That wasn't so clear to me at the start, though I gradually teased it out as the story progressed.

All in all this was some interesting science fantasy, reminds me vaguely of something I think Gene Wolfe might have enjoyed. A bit creepy and ethereal, too, but that only added to its appeal.

All in all a pretty good first effort. Thanks for sharing it.

Just submitted to a flash fiction contest tonight, Anons. Wish me luck.

I'm seriously thinking of just serializing the first book of my big sci-fi story on my Substack and trying to use my social media to advertise it.

I suppose I could advertise it here, too. I mean, if that Crocodile horror writer guy can make threads about his books here I guess anyone can, right? I think I'm a better writer than he is.