/lit/ - Literature

Poetry. I have been writing poetry for awhile but I've never really enjoyed simply because I don't think others will. Don't misunderstand, I love to write it, I just feel like if I were ever to show anybody I would be ridiculed and stuff like that. I mean, I like my poetry a lot, and I've never shown anybody. So I am going to show you guys, and I want you to be as honest as an asshole can be.


Sprung from a tin can, surrounded by foggy water.
I met the first moron holding ink, and a cold hard circle.
Broke through the gel just to see through the wall.
And intricate moist soggy wet hollow halls.
I reaped through the alien pointless unrest.
On mountains were sleeping the multiples of me.
and mundane fleeting thoughts not even known,
were more than a broken faced body alone.

reassured and pampered body of mass,
it's just another pool wrapped with wires.
derived from itself opinionated and crass
maybe it's just another joking whiner.

a sheltered unsheltered melting membrane ranked sir,
on some level knowing potential solution,
it's not for it, but for the heads of those around.
but keeps repellant on skin, so he can hear his own sound.
kept the brown showing through no sort of effort,
the stagnant grey waves of maybe not stinging legs
the steady pace kept by this skull in a bind
granted the chance to breathe more than chime.

reassured and pampered body of mass,
it's just another pool wrapped with wires.
derived from itself opinionated and crass
maybe it's just another joking whiner.

This is actually for a song I've been writing, and I just wrote it. Some of my better stuff is in a notebook at my house which I am not in right now, so please give me all criticism you can. Also, post your poetry. I am interested in reading it.