/lit/ - Literature

Hey /lit/,
I could really use some constructive crit on a story I'm writing. It's not a story I want anyone to take seriously or for me to publish, it's simply school course work and my English skills aren't amazing so I would appreciate if people will point out what's retarded about it and needs to be improved etc.. Cheers in advance for any feed back. So far I only have an intro.

It's been almost 2 years since The Great Uprising and what's left of society seems like for every step it takes forward, it's taking two backwards. Currency has gone down the drain. Banks are non-existent. Poverty and suffering is imminent. Everything that was once too familiar to humanity has collapsed and anarchy breaking out on a vast scale seems to be just on the horizon. A ticking time bomb ready to blow. Living proof that Totalitarianism was a failure from the off. A dystopia of corruption, manipulation and greed where the state controls every aspect of your life.