/lit/ - Literature

>>9499572
Take it from huzz, there's nothing like a bunch of crap thrown together. Well except the quiet enveloping darkness of boredom, & gotta send thx for that. Yeah, we get it, Hitler. Edgy. Parody. Wow.

Preposition Ratio: 10.21 %

Zombie Nouns:
'impression', 'religion', 'fiction', 'nation', 'explanation', 'celebration', 'conversation', 'passion', 'vacation', 'position', 'publicity', 'community', 'relativity'

Leeches:
'friendly', 'fully', 'promptly', 'nearly', 'truly', 'patiently', 'actually', 'only', 'probably', 'apparently', 'early', 'initially', 'softly', 'absently', 'nightly', 'needlessly', 'really', 'unruly', 'naturally', 'unusually', 'slightly', 'finally', 'overly', 'merely', 'similarly', 'instantly', 'Immediately', 'literally', 'sarcastically', 'strangely', 'postmaturely'

Lexical Diversity: 29.38 %

Content Carrying Words: 61.26 %

Personal Vocab Diversity: 44.41 %

Longest Word: 'Schellingstrasse'

>>8772859
Preposition Ratio: 8.53 % (Dynamic)

Zombie Nouns:

function
desperation
confession
emotion

Lexical Diversity: 35.49 %

Content Carrying Words: 57.91 %

Personal Vocab Diversity: 50.69 %

Longest Words (Ripe 4 deletion): misunderstood, sophisticated

I'll be honest: It's not as bad as it comes across. And but also the style isn't flush w/the AI stuff...

>>8481829
>>8481833
>>8481840
This is the kind of dialogue that plows a permanent 3rd rail into the reader's brain I mean, I'm totally spinning right now do ye have more? Is this part of the sum of some bigger project? Nabokov said too much dialogue = fat stupid garbage (dot com) but what the FUCK does he know? Right? Y not go full 'logue?

>>7419290
>Your Less Than Zero point
Ok, yr right, those are good points. I guess it bothers me that Ellis was so young and was just doing journalism. But I can't deny those facets. They ARE there. They do function the way you laid them out. Salinger was 32 when Catcher was published & I think you can feel the layers in that book. Layers that just aren't in LTZ, which is journalism, more or less—Ellis says this himself.

>disintegration
Ok. I meant, why does that happen?

>puts on another veil
A veil on what? This whole thing, inanimate matter animated and babbling signals at each other, it's fucking insane. So he's getting away from that?

>>7310095
Kathy Merman liked to ensnare herself in mounds of blankets. Blankets packed between cardboard and body pillows. She would lay back in the soft darkness and pretend to be drifting through space. If she did it long enough she would reach a point where the world gave way to the imagination. The squawking steam pipes of the basement became [—w/e—]. Beads of light between the cracks became previews of vast starfields. And her mother's muffled mandates became the clunking of an engine. Gravity became something relied on. It was the force that told her she hadn't left the planet. Being confined was freeing.

>>7205611
Prose of body-warmth, Christmas lights in the crevices of a fir tree—not a place of rationalized bullshitting, but screaming, laughing affirmation of life in a hearse of quotations→great dialogue flow, a pace like the pulse of a person.

>>6941720
Rly good meme, man.

>>6844928
Ever feel the crab claws of nothingness try and crawl out of yr skin? Well, I'm w/you either way.

I'm down w/yr story actually.

There is a moment when I saw the size of God's bright blue alcoholic eyes glint in yr post. On the downside, you were only able to post so much.

Use pastebin so we can read more.