/lit/ - Literature

>>23236513
I admit I was inspired by the GRRM "more she drank more she shat" passage. I thought a good shocking line like that would be a good way to draw the reader in.

What would be a better way to reword it? I couldn't think of another way of the boy needing privacy in the woods for an extended period of time, since if he needed to pee his father would just tell him to piss on the side of the road.

Fair point on the descriptions, I think I'll try to shave them down. I saw your well written description of the transformation and wanted to try and match it, but I realize it doesn't need to be that in depth for everything.