/lit/ - Literature

New thread >>20726590

>>20306399
I'm not really into military fiction, so I'm probably not the best anon to respond to this, but I read the whole damn thing, so what the heck.
I would have appreciated attention to basic spelling, grammar, and punctuation; I had to fight through that to understand what you were talking about.
The opening reminds me entirely too much of the premise behind the video game "Quake 2".
Your inaccurate word choices had the same effect:
* "The sergeant accessed the area": accessed -> assessed, I assume?
* "mission objects" -> "mission objectives"
* The noun form of "reconnoiter" is "reconnaissance", not "reconnoitering".
* Galactic Ordnance -> Galactic Ordinance
Plot wise:
* Why did they land 12 km from their objective? That's a long walk for no apparent reason, especially if there are no roads.
>>20306594
>GI Joe fan fiction
This...sorry to say.
>>20306630
>any real military SOP advice is appreciated thank you.
Ugh...do your own research.

>>16057781
o shit thats crazy