/lit/ - Literature

>>15371474

I like your poem. Nothing to say about it, because I never learned how to read or critique poetry. But I like it a lot.

>>14517422

You do a lot of hiking on acid for the first time?

Anyway, I'm not a poetry guy. Can't say much about it. I like the final line.

>>14518003

>within of what

Please fix this.

>splash mud

"Splash" in the infinitive tense suggests continual splashing of your clean white socks. Which doesn't make sense. Either they're dirtied the first time, or they're only splashed with mud once. If the latter, change it to "splashed".

>>14518462

You defer to stale and tired forms of description. Stop doing that. Make our investment pay off. Dazzle us a little. Be playful with your language.

>social inclinations
>pick something up
>jotting down things
>such isolation...still isolation


You can conjure up something better than that

You should be more economical with your prose. "Alex wasn't one for working, only beginning" would probably suffice.

>>13789344

living downtown Toronto isn't so bad, demographically speaking, and it's one of the most diverse cities in the worst. Do black people commit most of the violent crime? Yep. But on the whole, it's peaceful and cooperative. I go to festivals every week and there's nothing but mutual appreciation. The Polish street festival was amazing, the Taste of the Danforth was a beautiful celebration of Mediterranean culture. Caribana is even getting better. It's all coming together. Get out more. I'll agree that integration and immigration should be slower and more controlled so as not to supplant the existing culture so quickly.