/lit/ - Literature

>>15148026

The writing style is incredibly consistent and clear. This consistency however, blends the dialogue and the narration style together, which gives the feeling that the narrator is a part of the text. This is true for some parts of the narration and not others, some of the narration is given by molly and some of it by a third party (authour). Unless this is explicitly what you are going for, be careful about the divide between narrator, molly, and dialogue. I think this is what causes a bit of a funny feeling in the section after "guided him"

Shitposts are always funny though, and I love the idea behind this entire section