/lit/ - Literature

>>12875137
You used wet and warm together like 3 times in 1 page
Pretty bad honestly, and Im not even talking about the quality of the text but rather about your mentality. In erotic fiction what really gets the blood pumping down is the build-up, not an isolated blowjob. Sex scenes are easy as fuck to write, they are almost mathematic, is the scenario, the development to that moment when A grabs B's dick that tells you if its good erotica or not so when you made the choice of presenting this as proof of your writing skills you showed us how very little you actually understand about the very genre you are writing about, and I can safely assume by the answers youve been giving that this lack of understanding of the genre you are writing about permeates all over your work.
TL;DR: Stop being a fag, God hates it.