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>>Adah Phenric took a vow when she became a Knight of Valora. It was an oath required of every Knight blessed by the Goddess.
>>All was well until she and her team were sent on a routine mission to hunt a monster. Things go awry and Adah finds herself to be the sole survivor. Unconvinced her comrades are dead, she ventures out into the world to uncover the reasons for their disappearance.
>>Adah’s investigation leads her to uncover a larger mystery concerning the nature of the Goddess herself. Her mission soon leads her in conflict with a mysterious merchant. Monsters, mayhem, and the past threaten the stability of the world itself. Now Adah is forced to protect "all that threaten to burn world of Tymber."
No offense, but the blurb is kinda bad. Speak it aloud. Just a bunch of cold statemenets. Is your book also written this way?

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