/lit/ - Literature

>>10050255
I agree with what >>10050422 said, it's quite preachy and not even in a positive way. Here's a tip I learned about evangellization: preach the beauty of your cause first. I'd like to think most people are simple - they want to see or be a part of pretty things. Focus on making people see the beauty of your point of view or lifestyle - and they'll be more likely to join up. Simply wagging your finger at someone for not following your viewpoint is probably going to cause them to turn away quick. The themes of fellowship and hope in Lord of the Rings for instance, makes it a good propaganda piece for Christianity - it told the beauty of it first, then weaved the preaching/themes as it went along WITHOUT telling you to go all-out christian and praising Jesus.

Here's my piece. From this page alone it's pretty standard fantasy, though I hope it can later sucessfully evolve into a Groundhog Day, Murder Mystery in line with Re:Zero.
https://pastebin.com/iMq59G4c