/lit/ - Literature

Hey /lit/, if its not too much to ask for, mind giving my story a quick read? I've written a few, but this is the first one i feel is good enough to share with others.

Please be blunt if you have any criticism, i want to improve my writing.

On a final note, I'm not trying to be deep or ask the question of "what defines man as man?", it just came out like this in my writing.