/lit/ - Literature

Where are you William? WHERE IS HE?!??!

Egregore anon here. Come talk about your review. You are right about most of the negative aspects save a few you spent an unfair amount of time focused on.

>The "You ok?" "I do." moment. Pg.56
Not a mistake. Read the paragraph between.

>References to Plato being cringe
Yeah. Saundra was intended as a near insufferable pseud. As shallow and 'well ackshully' as this excuse is, overcoming the self brainwashing of higher education is her character arc.

Did you take notes? If so, can you point out the purple passages you found comical? Getting out of the habit of writing these is where I'm focusing with my next project. Some soar, some splat. I'm too deep into it to tell sometimes, as I spend 99.99% of my week with a toddler, which makes me borderline crackheaded aphasic on good days. I navigate around it with flowery speech. It's annoying.

But I have to sacrifice one of the two, raising my kids right or focusing on craft. Kids are obviously going to win out, as I don't have a mountain of cocaine or an office door to growl through like King.

You mentioned needing an extra set of eyes. Thanks for being said extra set of eyes. I'm gonna go back and patch it up.

Thanks for the review.