/lit/ - Literature

>>18401239
No problem, hope I help. And never be discouraged when writing. There’s always room for improvement. I know I improved. Here’s an excerpt of a story I stop writing.

Here’s this again, now I’m done with it. Thanks for the anons from last thread who critique my work. It’ll help me.

>>18209173
>>18209314
>>18209349
>>18209677
>>18209750
Thanks for the advice guys, I'll take into consideration when I write my story again, and good luck on your writing endeavors.


>>18209349
>overall appreciate the plain style. i was succesfully turned on, but the boy needs a haircut. the girl could do with one too. while youre at it, ask the barber to trim down the first three paragraphs into one because theres no need for such a long description for something that doesnt serve charater, plot, scene or ambiance. its a very usual waking up scene and starting out with a waking up scene is a very usual thing to do.
Will do, just have to get into the writing mood to do it, thanks.


>but i am intrigued because it cuts just when things start getting good so ill read it if you have the rest
Not much happens in the chapter, they get in an heated argument, which in turn, becomes a "fight" between the two of them which devolves into pic related.