/lit/ - Literature

>>6710759
>>6711494
Whiny-ness is always terrible.

But ye offered yrself up as fodder—so!

Ain't nothin wrong with your piece.

Semicolons are fucking stupid. I don't think Red Robin Workshop needs " ' "s that time you do that.

"Chilling sight"—ever read Lovecraft? That shit is annoying as hell.

Remember to put the heavy at the end:
>in labeled jars were eyes and ears and handfuls of teeth,

See what I mean?

You're treading in the wake of something. And it's obvious. But ye did bring your story to life, so there's that or whatever. Also, I'm mildly curious about yr plot's direction. Ayy.