/lit/ - Literature

>>15370412
These are suitable lyrics as is, brought to mind late Radioheadish sort of music
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4pFLXD1w8nQ

>>15370649
Very sneed anon

>>15370761
>Cycling
Pic. related, there's a dearth of cycle lit

>>15371250
>Are virgins gone, then?
>Then is virginity over?
>vestal/maid(-en/hood) done with thence
>They COME by the thousands, without rest
>... only show/still show/ their breasts
Itching to see it fall on "... bend/bent over" somehow in a more baudy/explicitly suggestive ending

I'd prefer going farther out there on Book XI
>A voice in the wilderness of three hundred


Like Book XII's rendering,
>Without you life's Perdition,
>But with you, here it's Hell
"But with you here," grinds the flow to a halt

>>15371474
The Diet Coke one is incredibly endearing and you should share it with yr mum

>>15371637
>As blackest skies foretell
>The heaviest tempest in steam
>Bellows foul from the black beast whistle
>Prophecies ...
>Rapidly... [This can't stand;eg ~ "clattering the hive"
Last three ant lines much improved, though I'd insist on the first three lines of the stanzas as a new unit in the first draft and their strength in that combination.
>The nest [swarms] over the station
>As they drown the tracks
>In their own [thunderous] non-existence

>>15372205
>The question hangs about as frozenly as the look on his face.
That line did it for me.

>>15372741
Amusing